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Etzos, ‘The City of Stones’ is a fortress against the encroachment of Immortal domination of Idalos. Founded on the backs of mortals driven to seek their own destiny independent of the Immortals, the city has carved itself out of the very rock of the land. Scourged by terrible wars of extermination, they've begun to grow again, and with an eye toward expansion, optimism is on the rise.

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66th trial, Yiden, 720
The Outer Perimeter
Just before midnight
Continued from here

Ulrik was, as had been said by friends and family alike, something of a twat. But at least he wasn't a cunt.

This is a fine distinction. To whit:

He teased and played tricks on his friends, but he did not betray them. He was morose and sullen when in his cups, but not violent. He wooed many a young lady, and took the virtue of more than one, but he did not abuse or lie to them. His charms were usually enough... such as they were. So those around him - from his despairing parents to his coterie of comrades - tolerated him, and enjoyed his japes at the expense of others. But he was never quite as trusted, quite as valued, quite as well-liked as he assumed he was.

"C'mon, y'look like frightened women!"

Now he stood in the doorway of the musty old home. Long-since abandoned by... him. The one they still whispered about, in those taverns Ulrik and Frankia and Exley had to find their courage to visit. They'd heard the name, the title, muttered by scarred men who they'd never try to fleece or con, like they did many others. Stamped on those older, crueler men was a violence they simply did not possess... yet even their visages cracked, for just a moment, when he was mentioned.

"Oh, stop it," Ulrik said with a roll of his eyes, reading the minds of his two friends. "He's long gone an' probably dead, innee? Woulda' come back by now if he wunt. I mean... look at this place!"

On the surface, he had a point. The house hadn't been lived in for some time. Not even the tracks of beggars and drunks marred the dust on the floors; just the smaller, quicker prints from rodents and felines (what few were left, anyway). Frankia shuffled forwards and craned her head into the doorway, peering around at the mold-covered wood and the dust and the smell of age and loss and-

"THE RAGGEDY MAN!"

"FUCK, shit, ASSHOLE, Ully?!"

"Fuckin' little tosser..."

Exly shook his head as Ulrik nearly fell over laughing. Frankia recovered herself admirably; living the life of a street rat in Etzos toughened one up quick. Doing so after the Siege, after the War... that was a whole new beast. Scowling at him and his shit-eating smile, she decided to let actions speak louder. She walked over the threshold, and into the house, leaving the two men acting like boys behind.

Soft wankers...

Once she was inside, it was... different. Easier to tolerate, she thought. Once the eyes were able to behold, the fantasies of the mind were lessened. She'd imagined nightmares carved into the walls. Bodies rotting under the floors. Ghosts and ghouls left behind by the Raggedy Man. Weapons, trophies... but there was nothing. It was the home of a mortal man, not a demigod of murder. But when she walked over to the splintered remnants of the bed, she could imagine someone squatting on the edge of it. Taking off his socks and boots. Tossing and turning until he could find a comfortable place to sleep. There was an old water jug, next to a wash basin. Cracked and chipped. Dry as the bones they looked like in the faint moonlight.

"He really did live here," she murmured. "Just a man, after all."

"Aye, well, let's not stand on ceremony," Ulrik said finally, turning with a flourish in front of the biggest, clearest wall in the house. "Let's get... famous!"

Another flourish, and his hands were loaded with brushes and a pot of black paint. They couldn't help but roll their eyes at the inane grin above it. All this, just to smear some crudeness on a wall. Oh, artistic crudeness, to a degree. Imaginative and original, one might argue. But still... just scrawling on the plaster. Frankia shook her head and took one of them. Exly took another, taciturn as always. They left Ulrik to make the first motions, decide what form and dimension his art would take. He tapped his lips with the end of the brush... then smiled.

"Yeah... yeah, I think... right... here..."

He popped open the pot, wetted his brush, and stuck his tongue out the side of his mouth like he always did.

"We'll put out name to it... an' the Raggedy-"

That's when it happened. Suddenly and with no preamble. With the dripping brush just inches away, the bare wall split in two. A white line of light cracked from floor to ceiling, like lightning slashed from the sky to the ground. As the three street rats stared and exclaimed, the line grew wider. As of something was pulling it from the inside. It seemed to bulge, until an aperture was torn into the wall... that was no longer a wall. Exly took a step forward. Entranced, and curious, and...

"... looks like water."

It did. The solid material was now shimmering and shaking like the surface of a pool. White and purple and yellow and other colors, all colors, all raced across the surface of it... but beyond them, was form. Some suggestion of it. Some shadow rising, like a monster from the bottom of that pool. And with a terrible, scraping, ripping sound the aperture tore open like a womb-

-birthing a small, slight man in simple clothes. Loaded down with weapons and a traveling bag across his back. He stepped out into the dusty old bedroom, faltering for a moment as if he'd just jumped from a height and was regaining his balance. The shimmering, dancing doorway behind him closed, and the kaleidoscope of lights was replaced by darkness and shattered moonlight once again.

There was no noise, save for his panting and the shallow, stunned breathes of the... oh... the man looked around and realized he was not alone. He straightened up, pure-black eyes looking from face to face... and he nodded.

"Eve'nin. Y'happen t'know what trial is it?"
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"Wh... Whuuuh... Whuh..."

Kasoria knew this was probably a shock. Wasn't everytrial some sod jumped through a wall at you, was it? But after a few patient trills of listening to Ulrik burble like a drunk songbird, he rolled his eyes and sighed.

"Fates, boy, gedda grip a' yerself!"

"You... How did you do that?"

The girl spoke next. Huh. Now he recognized her for a girl. He'd assumed her smooth cheeks were down to youth; now he peered closer in the gloom, he could see her hair bundled up under a work cap. Probably not wanting to give off too much of a feminine air, he'd wager. Girls who were too... well, girly, tended not to fare well among male "friends". They had to show a lot more iron, too, and so it wasn't too surprising she was the one who found her voice first.

"Long way from 'ere, girl. Now, what trial is it?"

Something broad and unsmiling stepped between man and girl. Kasoria's eyes flickered up into a pair far younger than his, yet with something of the same metal he once had. Still had, in fact. But in a face less craggy, worn, battered, and scarred by long arcs. The two men (for Exley could be counted as such, for grit alone) sized each other over the space of a long trill, and Kasoria finally nodded.

"C'mon, son. Ain' makin' no false moves on yer lady friend-"

"Oi, who said I'm his-"

"Stay behind me, Franky-"

"The buggerin' fuck I will-"

"Oh, for fuck's sake..."

The old man massaged his eyes and bowed his head for a moment. This was hardly an auspicious return. Two bits back in Etzos, and he was already dealing with halfwits and tedium. He sighed and the bob of his shoulders sent his load of goods and weapons clanking across his body. Finally he wiped a tired hand across his face and decided to try one more-

A hiss. A scrape. Metal on leather. Unmistakable to ears old and accustomed. Kasoria was reacting before the tiny sound had fully formed itself. Eyes sliding over to Ulrik, who was now holding a short, neat, cheap dagger in one hand.

Exley's eyes widened a fraction. The old man seemed to... change, in front of him. Cold radiated off him now, not just age. Fates, why did it... why did it feel like there was wind in here? Frigid and shuddering over his skin? Some animal instinct told him this would not end well. This... thing, with inhuman black eyes, festooned with weapons, who walked though walls and now had the icy look of a sewer snake... this was not a man he wanted to be near to. Not him, nor Franky, or even that wanker-

"Uly. Put it down."

"Shaddup, Ex."

"Uly," Frankia joined in now, not hiding behind Exley anymore, but... still sticking close. "Listen to him."

"Lissen t'yer friends, mate." His voice had changed, too. Steel across flint. Claws across stone. Ice frosting across a graveyard cairn. "Ain't lookin' t'spill any claret on me first night back... an' speakin' a that, which night would-"

"Y-You shuddup, too!" Ulrik snapped, fear in his eyes but a fool's courage powering his body forward. There was a brisk trade in weapons, even used one, and his deluded mind thought that if he could just procure them while the old sod was empty-handed, well... it would be easy. He took a step forwards, raising the blade to throat-level. "Start taking off those-"

SHUNK

Exley didn't know what happened. There was a blur of movement. A pair of hands, darting and jerking through the air between the old man and dumb fucking Ulrik. The thick, angry sound of flesh slapping into flesh and bone into bone... and when it was over, Ulrik's dagger was in his own shoulder. Right up to the hilt.

And for trials afterwards, Exley would swear that before all of that, he'd heard the briefest sigh. Of sheer, bloody annoyance.

"But I dint say I wouldn't, if yeh wanna act the cunt."

Ulrik's face went from red and flushed to white and terrified in an instant. But before he could fill his lungs to scream in agony-

-Kasoria's leg lashed out and the sole of his boot landed in the center of his chest. Little man insanely limber for one so small and old. Strong, too. Knocking Ulrik off his feet, back into the wall, and now Exley was moving, surging up in front of Frankia and growling softly as he drew back a fist, hurling it towards a face nearly the same size as it-

-until Kasoria looked at him, and there was a flash of power in those black eyes-

CRACK

Frankia yelped as Exley's fist slammed into a barrier of white light in front of the old man. Smashed into it like it was a steel shield, but instead of stopping it dead, it blasted him back as if a giant with a mace had struck him. Taciturn as ever, strong as ever her friend only grunted as a sickening wet snap told her a bone was broken. Big boy staggering back and down, cursing and nursing his arm now splashed white with protruding bone and Frankia opened her mouth to-

"Ah-ah-ah."

-except she didn't make a sound. Not a note nor a syllable. The little man raised his hand and the air around her curdled and thickened and hardened. Shackles wrapped around her, squeezing her ribcage and denying her breath, strangling her throat and denying her voice. The little old man stared at her with cold, black eyes. Something between annoyance and indifference striped across his face.

"One more time. Den m'gonna get nasty. What. Fuckin'. Trial-"

"The... The... Six..." Kasoria growled softly and lessening his ether a fraction. The Shackles around the girl loosened enough for her words to grunt out, bit by bit. "Sixty... sixth..."

He stood there for a while. Blinking. Not breathing. Twenty trials. Twenty trials of his life... just gone, and in the Emea it was barely a handful of bells. But why would the girl lie? What would she gain from that? Terrified, helpless, tortured by the sight of her friends laid low with ease? No... she was telling the truth.

"Y... You're him... aren't you?"

Black eyes the same depth and texture as the shadows surrounding them slid back to her. Weighing and measuring the life he held in hands of ether. He could end her. End all of them. Three little lives, snuffed out in an empty house, and who would care? Etzos still stank of death, dying and dead and decaying. Three more corpses on the wagon wouldn't be-

"P... Please... don't..." Kasoria looked at her. Straight into her eyes. And saw a tiny ocean of calm in the middle of fear and horror. Even as tears bled down her face. "Don't... hurt them..."

Kasoria smiled. After a fashion. He was still unused to the gesture. But it was there, for a moment, before vanishing like a ghost in the night. Etzos. His home. The place that was already back in his ears and nostrils and into his lungs and heart from the soles of his feet to the hairs on the nape of his neck and oh, oh he had missed the glorious old bitch. The place that birthed him, and still surprised him.

Like when such concern, such friendship, surfaced and let itself be seen in the face of Vri. From gutter rats and petty hoods, that fine folk would spit on for lacking any semblance of honor and loyalty. Well, fuck them, too.

He lowered his hand. Frankia slumped down to all fours. Coughing and choking and barely able to look up when the man started speaking.

"Youse see my face agen, girl... you run the other fuckin' way. Yeh ken? Hmm?"

"Y-Yessir. W-We will."

"Good. Tell yer friend wiv' the knife in 'im not t'take it out. Long as he does, healer'll patch it up wivout 'im bleedin' out. Yer man inna corner gots what I'd say's a nice, clean break on 'is lower arm, but same healer'll splint that an' be done. There's one lives jus' up the road, three lefts, next t'the bakery-"

"I-I-I know, but we can't afford-"

Coins tinkled onto the ground in front of her. Gold ones. Enough for all the healing he'd mentioned. Bewildered, she looked up with wide eyes at the face of a man who'd come close to crippling the boys, then drop precious monies to stymie his own work.

"W... Why?"

"Cuz someone I know wouldnae wun' me fallin' back inta' ol' habits," the old man said, then smiled in a way a little less ghoulish than before. "'sides, s'me first night back. Caught me inna good mood." The smile widened. Hardened. Sharpened. Bled away from his eyes and Frankia gulped. "But I wouldn' bet on dat happ'nin twice."

The little man shifted the pack on his back and pulled the cloak's hood back over his head. He gave a swift salute with two fingers, and walked out door. Leaving no plume nor stench nor words behind him. Save for the girl on her knees in his wake, gaping at the fluttering hem of his cloak as it skittered out of sight. She spoke two words as he vanished. He did not hear them, but by the end of the season, it would be spoken again where once it was consigned to memory.

"Raggedy Man..."
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It didn't take long for the cloak of familiarity to settle over him again. The feeling of the cobbles under his feet... the wind whipping through the narrow alleys... the sounds and smells of a city built on commerce and earth scraping wafting into his face and lungs and mind and soul. All things he'd not forgotten in the seasons he'd been away, but they'd lessened, somewhat. There was no substitute for personal experience, after all. Now he was back, and all that time away seemed to have been nothing. An afternoon trip, instead of half an arc.

Kasoria was home, and it felt...

"Mmmm."

Something new was wheedling its way into his consciousness. As he strode from alley to alley, street to street, shadow to shadow, a sense of unease was growing in his stomach. He'd learned long ago never to ignore feelings like that. They'd often kept him alive when all rational thought would have seen him dead. But he couldn't place it. Couldn't name it. The streets were the same, or as much as they could be, for most of the Oh'Pee had to be rebuilt from the flagstones up. There was life here again. People and families and workers and merchants and thugs and derelicts... and even at this late bell, they floated through the night as they always had.

But something was pulling at him. Needling away. As if he were in a lucid dream where all seemed so real and solid but underneath lurked something else.

Fuck it.

He shook his head and plowed on, mapping his route mentally even as he quickened his pace. He wasn't here to learn and spy and gather intelligence. A horse, rations for ten trials, and a bed until mid-morning. That was his goal. Everything else was a luxury, or a distraction. He could have used the Emea to get back to Westguard, but after hearing how much time had passed since his last trip through a Crossing portal... no, he didn't want to chance it. He surmised it was to do with distance, that the more ground you covered in the real world, the longer the trip through the Emea, but he didn't know for sure. Who was to say that when he passed through again, he would could out this season, even this arc? No... the old way was best, for now. And he was not short on coin for the getting, either way.

Ain't your problem anymore, he reminded himself, walking swiftly as wind blew trash at his feet. You did your part, now-

Words stopped him. Mind and body and feet. He looked down at the pamphlet he'd stepped on, the scrap of wrinkled paper with a stark header across the top in thick, clear letters:

"These Being the Words of High Marshall Parhn..."

Kasoria frowned, and picked up the paper. In that empty alley, he stood and he read. His brow furrowed deeper and deeper as he did. Were anyone close enough to peer into the shadows of his hood, he would see slow, acidic anger growing in those black orbs. A fury that he thought he'd excised seasons ago, with the death of a single (but crucial) man. Now he read that was not the case. That his efforts, his blood, his agonies and triumph was nothing, had done nothing, to stop the cancer he'd sought to expose. No... not at all.

He read and read and read again. Then he cursed savagely, tore the paper in half, and stalked off. On a new route. To a new place.

He needed to learn. He needed information. Westguard and his son would have to wait.
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Knowledge:
Skill Knowledge:
Discipline: Don't Fall Back into Bad, Old Habits...
Discipline: ... But Not Allowing Important Work to be Left Unfinished
Intimidation: Ensuring Mercy is Not Confused with Weakness
Psychology: Seeing Traits of Yourself in Others
Research: Public Literature
Stealth: Using Abrogation to Silence a Potentially Noisy Witness

Non-Skill Knowledge:
Dreamwalking - Crossing: Time Spent Traveling in the Emea is NOT The Same as in the Waking World
Etzos, Late-Ymiden 720: Still in the Thrall of Sintra and Her Minions

Loot: -
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Injuries: -
Renown: 5, for scaring three friends, but sparing their lives.
Magic XP: -
Skill Review: Appropriate to level.
Points: 10
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Comments: Your threads are always a joy to read. I already told you so before, but I like how you often include a scene or a post from a NPC’s point of view. I think that’s an interesting technique and really adds to the thread. I was amused by how Ulrik and his two friends were taking a look at Kasoria’s old house – as if it were some sort of scary haunted house!

And when Ulrik decided to “decorate” the walls only for Kasoria to suddenly show up a few moments later … oh my! The final line where Kasoria greeted the three friends was great!

Kasoria’s thoughts about them – as well as their reactions – were entertaining to read. I had not expected Ulrik to actually try to attack Kasoria – and his friends to do something similarly stupid. I’m glad that he spared their lives – and that he eventually found out which trial it was!

I also enjoyed his walk through Etzos and the observations that he made during that walk.

This was an exciting thread!

Enjoy your rewards!

P.S.: You didn’t list which skills you used in the review request. In my opinion, several skills would have applied – Discipline, Intimidation, Stealth and Detection, for example. I checked your CS, but please make sure to fill out the review request form completely next time!

P.P.S.: I appreciate the Futurama reference in the review request!
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