A Wedding Dance

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20th of Ymiden 718

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A Wedding Dance

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20th Trial of Ymiden, Arc 718
The streets of eastern Yaralon were damp from a recent rain. The skies broke overhead, though little sun was visible at a time near to sunset. Despite the smell of Yari, sweat, and shit of the city, the air had a certain refreshing appeal. Alora didn't mind it, having come out of the absolute cesspit of Augiery.

She wore her leathers, and over them a dress that consisted of a loose-fitting cotton blouse and sarong, wrapped by a sash. Her boots clipped against the cobbles of the street as she made her way from the smoke den. Her daily visits had taken their toll on her constitution, so it was good to get some 'fresh' air once in a while.

She glanced at the faces in the crowd, always on alert, her hand on the haft of her steel mace, where it hung from her sash. Yari were a dangerous lot. Rigid and honorable, the decades long shift from a dark treacherous city like Augiery, to one such as this, where honor is supreme, was a bit of a shock. Even so, she learned her way through their ways.

She'd made the damned fool mistake once or twice of getting caught alone in an alley without her weapon. One man had chanced upon her then, Shual was his name. Luckily he had no witnesses to confirm that she hadn't a weapon on her at the time, and so it was her word against his. Ever since, he'd hounded her through the streets, claiming that she was his rightful spouse. She obviously thought him to be a dullard and fool, ripe for slaughter.

That didn't detract from his determination to see that she be his. They'd fought several times over the course of the decade. He aging much swifter than she as a Naer. This only seemed to drive his sense of lust and desire after her.

It was on this day that she found herself once more face to face with the gray-bearded fool. Shual smirked as he surrounded her with a few of his compatriots. She stood her ground, planting her feet, and laying a hand on her weapon. "What's the matter Shual? Have you gathered this throng of quarterling cowards enough to make one real, full man?"

"Wife! You've eluded me for trials, but now I will wait no longer. I issue a formal proposal of marriage. You will be mine."

"I'm glad this is nearly over, then, Shual." She gave him a cruel smirk, "You needn't have waited until you were old, withered, and gray. Consider your proposal formally declined."

He unsheathed his cutlass at that, and pointed it toward her neck, taking a few steps back for good measure. "Challenge!"

She pulled her mace from her sash, and hefted it to a foreward stance. The other hand she used to grasp a dry, oil-tampered torch from her belt, which she struck against the ground, lighting it in an instant.

The duel was on. His men watched as they had it out. One of them had the decorations of a darstrion, come to watch the ensuing duel. Her face twisted in a wry frown as she realized he'd set her up for this.
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Shual made the first move. He turned his blade over his shoulder, then brought it down to bear on her, attempting to strike her with the spine of his backsword. She hopped on the backfoot, dodging the blow by a narrow margin.

His bladework was swifter than she anticipated of an older man. He didn't give her time to breathe before he struck downward. This time he led with the edge, bringing it down, aiming for her shoulder. She parried with her mace, the iron of it's haft ringing against his edge. Thus as swift as he'd brought his sword down, she followed the arc of his weapon, as he returned to form, trying to fend him off with the torch. Trying to put him on the backfoot through intimidation with the flaming offhand weapon.

Remember the forge, your kin in the coals, softening the sword so that it could take shape. An artifact forged from earth, softened by fire fed by air. The fire barely responded to her request, but sparked as the torch's shaft rang in contact with the mace's haft. The licks of flame caressed the steel as the sword as it recoiled by the side. However, the contact wasn't enough for the flames to be convinced to reach out.

She smiled at him. His sword swung forward repeatedly, side-stepped here, parried there.

The flames danced along with Alora's combat with Shual, every stroke of flame and mace rang in the sounds of their duel throughout the entire alley. Finally, she threw the torch over his shoulder. It landed five yards behind him. Now came the second stroke.

His face twisted in anger, and attempted to end it then and there, slicing horizontal, aiming for her neck. She brought the mace up to deflect it once more, leaning backward to avoid the strike.

It was Allora's turn to take the attack to him. She made a flourish with her mace, emulating a unarmed maneuver to feint at him with repeated swipes, but always missing him. She was careful to avoid contact with the sword as it moved to intercept her feigned strikes against him.

He brought his blade downward in a strike over his shoulder. She stepped backward, feigning the appearance of confusion, her stance open. It was an invitation of sorts.

He brought the blade down with all his strength, attempting to knock the weapon out of her hand. She let it go by, moving her hand to evade the strike of his blade. Alora anticipated the followup, but was prepared to end it by then. She parried a few more times, sidestepping his attacks here or there. Then, as Shual was beginning to show signs of fatigue, She came forth, bringing her mace to bear.

Shual brought his blade up to try and deflect her mace from it's arc toward his face. Little did he know that wasn't her ultimate target. She used her offhand to grip the mace two-handed, one on the handle and the other beneath the head. She battered the sword, pushing it down with the haft. Shual took the bait, attempting to knee her in the stomach as she leaned into the sword. Alora rose, disengaging with the mace, and swiftly sweeping his one, standing leg with a low-kick. It wasn't quite enough to take him off his feet, but it put him severely off balance. Enough that he botched his next parry. Shual gripped his blade with his offhand to shield against the mace, forming an ill-advised block. She took that as an opportunity to strike at the hilt with all her might, unsettling his grip on the weapon. It fell out of his hands.

Disarmed, and defeated, Shual's eyes widened in disbelief.

Alora would have ended his life then and there, but she was intercepted by the darstrion witnessing the fight. He stopped her as she rose her mace to end him.

"No, you have won an honorable victory. He will have to leave the city in dishonor."

"I want his head as a trophy." She pouted, "His skull will make a fine candle-holder. Does it matter if he dies out there beyond the wall, or here in the city? It's my victory, I will decide how this ends."

Shual couldn't help but speak his piece, "You honorless Grudge-bagger. I found you fair and square, completely unarmed in that alley down the way! You belong to me, whether you like it or not."

Alora looked at Shual only a moment before sparing a glance toward the darstrion once more. "Are you sure, I can't kill him?"

"His weapon was disarmed. This is over. Leave him to me, sister. I will see that he's dishonored and sent into exile."

She breathed angrily, then grunted, leaving the four to hover over the old fool. If she couldn't have him here, she would hunt him like an animal in the wilds.
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Alora

Points awarded: 10xp

Knowledge:
Dancing: Rhythm in combat
Bludgeon (Mace): Shattering a weapon that's been heated, then chilled.
Bludgeon (Mace): Feigning the direction of your weapon.
Acrobatics: Combative dodging
Unarmed Combat: Sweep the Leg
Tactics: Wearing down the enemy.

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10 points for winning a public duel, with plenty of witnesses

Notes:

Not bad at all! You wore the bugger down pretty well, though I would have liked seeing some more insights into the Mad Sod's obsession with you. You need some work with combat terms - DEFLECT is like parrying, BLOCK is something much more solid and unmoving - and I liked how you used Alora's speed against the old man. Try to make your enemies a little less predictable, too: Old Boy kept going for the over the shoulder move so much I thought even Alora would roll her eyes!

All in all, though? Good job, and noble victory. Let's hope the demented fool doesn't come back for a rematch.

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