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[Ne'Haer Docks] Every New Beginning

76 Ashan, 709, Late afternoon

Docks of Ne’Haer
The late Ashan afternoon was crisp and breezy, with the wind particularly strong over the water, whipping sails and making the rigging dance on the other ships around the docks. Most of the vessels were well-worn, with a small sloop nestled among them, out of place being shiny and new but still without sails and rigging. The sun was casting long shadows and golden light, if only because the evening was slowly creeping along the horizon where the sky met the Orm’del sea.

The small ship’s deck wasn’t sanded yet, much less coated properly for protection against the waves, but the sloop was afloat, finally. The hull had been painted and sealed with a rusty orange, but a bold white stripe was visible just above the waterline that washed lazily in the harbor where the unfinished vessel had been moved to the docks for the rest of its construction, mainly because Traek had found his repair queue far too full this season to keep personal projects in the way of business. No name had been given to the small vessel yet, although the young man who it would come to belong to had named it long before the first boards had even been shaped. Moving it from the shipyard had been a difficult choice, but one that Pash agreed to, their building of his sloop together a work of love instead of just for nel, though it was still a bittersweet task.

The skies had been clear for a few trials, and so the father and son pair had slipped away early from their work on other vessels in the shipyard to the docks like children shirking responsibilities in order to go play on the beach. They laughed at old jokes, Traek somewhat becoming nostalgic as he told stories about Pash’s precocious childhood just to embarrass the young man while they lugged two rolls of sailcloth between them along with ropes and tools. It was heavy, slow going, but they kept each other entertained and amused—

"Immortals, da, there’s some stories that’re really worth me not remembering." Pash smirked, rolling his lagoon blue eyes as they carefully began to load their cargo up the gangplank in order to get the sloop rigged for sailing. They’d bring it back to the shipyard in a trial or two to finish the deck, once one of the dry docks was open again, and there was still plenty of work to be done in the cabin to make the sloop livable.

"It’s not a bad thing to have the whole story," Traek teased, his expression mischievous as a grin creased its way into his well-weathered features, "even yours. Puts things in perspective, you know, qu’oat."

The young man laughed, the two at least sharing a common humor despite how the arcs had proven they did not share too many similar passions. While Pash had now worked alongside his father in his shipyard for nearly eleven arcs in various capacities, the man having all but raised the boy with a hammer in his hand from the time he was seven, if only because it was quickly clear the Ne’Haer formal education system would not contain him, he’d come to realize that he didn’t quite receive the same satisfaction in seeing a completed vessel on the water as Traek did. No, his creativity blossomed elsewhere, in music and song and dance—trivial things, his father would say in his rare but sour moments—and what pleased the young Biqaj the most had over the arcs become pleasing others, entertaining them. Not building ships.

And so this sloop was to be his last—his.

"I’ll give you that." Pash offered even as their hands together began to make quick work of the rigging, dropping the folded sailcloth onto the unsanded deck before both of them began to organize the ropes and lines needed to get everything hung and ready properly. He took the ropes his father handed him and began to climb the mast, shimmying up the single pole as if he were climbing a slim tree, using his bare feet, knees, and hands with the rope over his shoulder. He’d have to get everything arranged just right for the mainsail to raise and lower smoothly with the pulleys and such, "But you're going to have to trade me a story about when you were that young, lest I come to believe you never were."
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The breeze was toying with Yrmellyn Cole’s hair and made it dance and billow in the air like a cloud of dark gold around her head and face, blurring her vision as she walked down to the docks of Ne’haer this afternoon in Ashan 2009. She stopped to push it back and braid it to a long, loose braid and tied it with an old crinkled ribbon black as coal.

Everything else was new these days.

The elegant dresses she had used to wear were only memories now. The past was gone. The painter was dressed in pants and jackboots, shirt and jacket, all of common quality. She had left her hat at home because she was tired of having to hold a hand on it in order to not lose it to the breeze and have to chase it along the streets of Ne’haer. The backpack where she kept her sketchpad and pens and other utensils of her painting kit was on her back, as always. She never went anywhere without it. Art was what she had, art was even what she was and she brought it with her wherever she went.

Yrmellyn hadn’t felt like singing for a long, long time, but now she found herself humming a bittersweet melody of a tune of her past, words half forgotten. How was it again? The tune was going on repeat in her mind, insistent but elusive. “How you turn around and how you’re whirled around, make certain... hum, hum, hum-hum hum-hum, huuum... ”

She passed by the big trade ships and all the bustling activity around them and continued to the zone where smaller ships were moored. There was always a lot of good motifs for paintings there. There were boats and people, clouds of seagulls diving down in search of food, silent cats who sneaked around looking for fish, dogs barking from boats they were guarding, the sound of water lapping against the piers when waves rolled in and broke, the vast ocean behind it all the way to the horizon and above it the sky of Ashan spanned it’s blue vault like a protecting cloak.

Yrmellyn had visited the harbor before. Still it felt different.

For the first time since she had left Rharne she didn’t feel like she had died and turned into a walking dead. A spark of life glimmered faintly in her personal mental cloud of eternal night. Had this been what she had hoped for when she had travelled away from everything she had been? She didn’t know. That period of time in her life was unclear to her now. Her memories felt veiled and so odd and incredible that she couldn’t not wonder if it all really had happened or if it had been a dark dream. Still she knew it wasn’t. The story of her life was true.

“How you turn around and how you’re whirled around, make certain... hum, hum, hum-hum hum-hum, huuum... ” Flute, lute, the light voice of a child contrasting with the sound of a hoarser, harsher voice, like the twitter of a songbird with the cry of a raven, beauty, glory, sorrow, night. Not for a long time had she allowed herself to let such thoughts arise and bloom, no, not for a long time.

At a distance she could see two men work on a newborn ship that wasn’t ready to sail yet. Perhaps it was the appearance of novelty that made her decide to walk closer. All things new appealed to her these days, whilst she was on the run from all things old. She wanted a new city, a new life, a new chance and new visions, new dreams and new art.

When she came nearer she could hear the two men speak and laugh and she could see that one of them was middle aged, the other one so young that he seemed barely out of childhood.

During her years as courtesan Yrmellyn had become adept at judging the age, positions and potential wealth of people. The middleaged man struck her as a crafter, a self-assured crafter judging from the calm way he moved and worked without hesitation, perhaps a craft master. The young man, likely less than twenty arc old, seemed to know what he was doing too. She found it easy to imagine that they were a master and his apprentice, accustomed to work together and obviously comfortable with it.

A happy motif.

The seagulls dove through the air again, squawking.

She shouted a greeting to the men and asked if they would allow her to paint them while they worked.
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"—so y’ jus’ left Yarik on th’ island like that, da’at? For how long?" Pash was laughing at the story Traek was finishing, a story of his childhood with one of his brothers. They’d stolen a boat from the shipyard much as Pash had done just barely an arc ago, and the pair had spent a whole trial enjoying themselves in the open sea, only for Traek to get cold feet and want to head home. Yarik, his older, more troublesome brother—now a redeemed ex-pirate and retired Blade from Ne’Haer’s military— had refused to leave with him and stayed on their island they’d discovered alone.

"Yes, I left his sorry ass." Traek grinned, perhaps pointedly at his son as if to remind him that no, he hadn’t forgotten last arc’s misadventure after all, "But I came back for him before dark, so just a handful of breaks really. We were in so much trouble. For several ten-trials. So, I suppose it runs in the family."

His father’s expression warmed as if he had more to say, and then someone shouted a greeting.

"Es’jah!" Traek returned first in his language, the older man smiling and moving toward the railing of the sloop as the woman greeted them, "Hello, y’self—"

"Paint us?" Pash dropped from his place up the mast a few feet above the unfinished deck of his sloop and landed with a grin on his face, quite taken with the idea of being part of a scene, any scene honestly, in which he was an object of attention. While his preference was in a crowd, preferably with his grandfather’s lute or his voice, a painting was a novelty that certainly caught the ever-insatiable gaze of his curiosity, "What for? We’re jus’ buildin’ a boat."

Granted, it was his sloop and he was going to sail away in it (finally) a few seasons from now, but having grown up around the shipyard his whole life, the aspiring musician was genuinely invested in figuring out what sort of interest the woman’s audience would have in ships and shipbuilding … although, he admitted wordlessly to himself, it could be the people and their dynamic she was more interested in. The tall Biqaj considered himself interesting, and, truth be told in rare form for his youthful age and disposition, he also considered his father interesting, even though it was easy to give the older man a hard time,

"If y’ can stand th’ small talk, then you’re welcome t’ hang around." Traek chuckled with a roll of his blue eyes—a trait he and his son shared, though of course like U’Frek’s aurora their colors shifted and changed with their feelings, too, "I’m Traek Vy’Ryn, Shipright, an’ this be my son, Pash."

The younger Biqaj waved at his name and let his lagoon blue eyes wash over the woman and all that she carried with her for painting with actual curiosity, "Ry’tsam! Nice t’ meet you. What’s your name? How long’ve y’ been paintin’?"

His father chuckled, aware that Pash could ask more questions than the woman was really willing to answer, but he stood away from the railing and went back to work on the sloop’s rigging while his eldest lingered to learn more.
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Sorry it took me so long to reply to this! I had to get back into young Pash’s headspace.
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“Yrmellyn Cole.”

The tall young biqaj had all the natural beauty and energetic charisma healthy people in their earliest adulthood use to possess. He also seemed curious, good humored and easy to speak with. Yrmellyn smiled at him and thought of herself and how she had been just a few years ago. Love, magic and death had shifted her life and transformed her so profoundly that her past self felt unreal. She knew the laughing, shallow courtesan she recalled had really been her, but this seemed so distant to her these days that it could as well have been a picture painted of herself as toddler. Logically she knew she wasn’t old, and hardly more than a few years older than the young man, but a mage’s mind is never young, no matter the body it lives in.

She noticed Traek Vy’ryn’s smile and chuckle, the warmth in his gaze and the hint of humor when he said that she could stay if she could stand “the small talk”. He was clearly referring to his son Pash, joking a bit about the youngster’s immediate eagerness to chat, but in friendly way.

“I have been painting for a couple of years” she told them.

Yrmellyn promptly took off her backpack, put the easel up, pulled up an empty create beside it and sat down. Then she rolled up a piece of canvas and fastened it on a thin wooden frame she folded up and arranged on the easel. She decided to use coal to make a basic sketch of the two men and the boat they were building, then paint with the oil crayons.

She answered Pash’s questions while she worked.

“I make a living painting portraits of rich people and their family member and animals and houses. Everything is very nicely arranged in order to make the picture as flattering as possible. I’s fine, but it also can get boring when people are busy doing nothing else than being beautiful. At least that’s all they do when they sit for arranged portraits. There ought to be more to people than just pleasant appearance. I like to paint people who are doing something of importance to them. Real life, living people, not just people acting like decorative dolls.”

Yrmellyn started to make a sketch of the two men building a ship. Her gaze darted back and forth between the canvas and the motif while the sketch quickly grew. She drew with what she called “a light hand” and the lines she made were thin and grey. It was only meant to be a framework for the painting to come, where she would add color, life and personality to the pictures of the people she portrayed. The people ... yes, the people. She wasn’t unaware of the youthful charm of Pash Vy’ryn, or the more mature charm of Traek. Such father, such son? They were working together so maybe they were likeminded?

While she sketched she had a few questions of her own. “What kind of ship is it you are building? What is it meant for? Is it a fishing boat?”
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The same, my dear Pash. Memories can be a bit hard that way. No need to rush the writing. You will also get to live with my picture experiements as I don't know how Yrmellyn looked in 2009^^
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“I’m a musician.” Pash offered with a lopsided sort of grin when Yrmellyn revealed she’d been painting for a few years, though Traek may have snorted from behind the jib sail at the words, “M’ grandfather taught me t’ play th’ lute a few arcs ago, an’ he says I’m a natural talent.”

The inflection of his Rakahi-accented maturing baritone revealed no small hint of rebelliousness, the boy very aware that his own father was within hearing range and unashamed to make such an announcement. Perhaps Traek’s noise of objection spurred Pash on further, his grin unfaltering in his curiosity to watch the woman unpack her things and set up her creative space.

She painted portraits of affluence? Well, perhaps there was nel in that, after all. He’d only managed to get a few short bits playing music here and there at local taverns, though he couldn’t say he was that great at the lute yet. His grandfather, he said, insisted he had an ear for it and, more importantly, a heart for it, though Pash didn’t quite yet feel as though he had the fingers or the patience for it. Working at the shipyard kept him moving, kept him busy, even if building ships was, honestly, about as boring as painting a bunch of rich folks in fancy clothes sitting still sounded like.

He didn’t hate working with family, the physicality of the job something Pash needed as a person, though he was far too short-sighted and eager, far too self-centered in his youth to appreciate anything he had, anything he’d been given in life by his father’s talents and good fortune. Traek owned his own shipyard proudly, and he came back behind his son to put a hand on his shoulder and imply he should be helping, not staring,

“I’ve built a few ships for rich folks, nobility that is,” the older man smirked, though he didn’t roll his eyes, “I’m pretty sure most of ‘em have just sat around in th’ harbor and gone about as far as a painting.”

He laughed, rolling his shoulders before Pash turned and followed him. Between the two of them, they began to feed fresh ropes into brass pulleys and clasps, preparing to raise the mainsail first and then set up the jib,

“This ship’s called a sloop.” Pash answered as he passed by the rail again, smiling down at Yrmellen with an armful of rope, headed toward the bow of the small ship, “An’ it’s mine, or it will be, once she’s finished. She’s meant for sailin’, both coastal waters an’ th’ open sea. ‘Bbout th’ smallest kind o’ vessel that can sail ‘cross open waters.”

He began to tie a round turn and two half hitches knot with one of his ropes, securing the line to the bow. Taking the tail of the rope, he wrapped it with a round turn around the proper spot in the bow’s railing, securing it to the standing part with two hitches, passing the tail over and under twice,

“I’m hopin' t’ travel, t’ see Idalos an’ play music wherever I go.” Pash paused when he said that, the tall young Biqaj clearly committed to the statement. Traek, who’d otherwise been quite free with his commentary, said nothing, his back turned on the boy, and had the woman known either of them (though she didn’t), she would have recognized his silence wasn’t complicit approval so much as annoyance,

“But there’s a handful o’ ten-trials left ‘f work t’ do … dependin’ on how busy th’ shipyard gets this season. I won’t be travelin’ any time soon. Are y’ from Ne’haer? Been anywhere else?”

He wasn’t about to admit in front of his father he’d snuck to Bayward once or twice with his cousins, even with Torim. While his father probably knew, Pash didn’t want to hear the disapproval later, aware that the pirate town was full of debauchery and danger. That’s why he went, after all, lute in hand and eager for adventure,

“I’m always open t’ travel suggestions.”
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OOC: As we agreed on in PM, we wrap up here and I will write an epilogue for Yrmellyn now. The thread was a brief meeting and a memory. Perhaps the painting will hang on the wall in the home of Pash’s parents. Please feel free to add a post before you hand in for your review, if you like. Several breaks later

The two men had continued to work and the painter had continued to paint. Yrmellyn had found Pash refreshing and fun, a lovely young man and so full of dreams and expectations. Life wasn’t always so good to her children, she knew this, but there were also people who lived good lives and never had to deal with any kind of hardships. She hoped Pash would be one of those lucky people. This was what she painted into the picture, good wishes, good wishes, good wishes for father and son alike. While she worked it occurred to her that she had never before been thinking this way, like it was possible to paint something more into a picture than what met the eye.

The idea, abstract as it was, would intrigue the painter from this day on. No matter that it might come off as a wild geese hunt to other people, she would continue to think of ways to weave her thoughts and other things into the paint and canvas and imbue it with properties she didn’t even have a name for. She would forever be looking for something unknown and invisible. The search for this mystery would make her keep trying out a multitude of paths in the hopes that they would lead to the goal of her dim, dim, glow of longing. But what this was, she didn’t know.

The painting of Pash and his father building the boat together was finally done. Behind them was the white city, in front of them the blue ocean, and over it all was the sky and the sun and the clouds of sea birds. Just like the waves of the ocean, they never rested, those birds.

She handed the biquaj the painting, told them she would recall them, packed up her things and left the pier. Another woman would maybe have stayed and chatted, joked with the young biqaj, perhaps even learnt to know him and the family a bit, but many things were different to Yrmellyn Cole. When she was done with her picture she smiled and went her way. She was a painter and a mage. Now when new and inspiring thoughts had started to brew in her mind they engulfed her attention entirely.

The dim, dim glow of longing drove her on, the spark of magic fluttering in the wind of her wizard mind.

She walked in among the houses of light stone and disappeared out of sight.
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Had Pash not been his son, Traek would have perhaps been more impatient with the eager boy who spent more time peeking at all the woman on the docks was making of their work than actually working. His curiosity would have bordered on the annoying, insatiable as it was, but other than his grandfather as a woodworker and his mother as a weaver, he’d never been so close to someone else’s creative process. A handful of musicians had over the past few arcs shared their time with him, but it was different, sometimes even competitive in some rowdy Bayward tavern, playing for nels.

Not that Pash cared about coin, unlike so many of his people. Perhaps it was because he’d never wanted too much of anything, save the freedom he longed for to sail once this sloop, his sloop, The Muse was finished. Perhaps it was because he valued people and stories more than things. Whatever the case, he was a rare Biqaj in that material wealth didn’t appeal to him, casually unaware of the wealth that had been handed to him in a family that loved him, in steady work as a shipwright, and in the bounty of U’Frek’s seas.

Traek was careful to keep a balance, allowing his eldest his curiosities but also making sure that he kept his hands busy with the tying of knots—each one specific for the task it had in the rigging. The boy’s father was somewhat fanatical about proper knots, his oft-repeated motto was heard several times that trial: “Whatever its job, there’s an ideal knot, hitch or bend for that rope.”

Pash, of course, rolled his eyes and did what he was asked, learning the straights and curves of his own future vessel in this somewhat bare beginning to their relationship. He was somewhat surprised that when Yrmellyn had finished with her painting, she offered it to them. His father, of course, was much more eloquent in his thanks, the boy grinning eagerly to hold it and see it up close, curious about the brush strokes that had covered all of her sketching.

But then she was gone, up the docks and back the way she came. Somehow, Pash understood, perhaps because of their shared creative spirit hidden under sawdust and pitch.

“I think we should take it home.” He offered with a grin, “Mother may appreciate it in the weaving room.”

“Aye, agreed, boy.” Traek chuckled, though his words bordered on the rueful and chiding, “And she’s captured your likeness enough that Ilynn can see your face when you’ve gone and sailed off.”
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Pash

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Always fun to read a thread you're in - and young Pash is very cute. The only thing I'd say about this thread is that it went to it's final posts very abruptly. I can understand why, you had some gaps between posts and memory threads are tricky but it was just a little jarring. I'm not sure you could have done it differently though! Great relationship with the NPCs and lovely dialogue.

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XP: 15

Fame: +2 (general chat around etc)

Loot

Pash's father has possession of a portrait by the talented Miss Cole.

Knowledge

Skill Knowledge:
Climbing: Using your knees and feet
Climbing: Up the mast
Ship Building: Rigging a sloop
Ship Building: Preparing the sails
Seafaring: Round turn and two half hitches knot
Seafaring: Whatever it’s job, there’s an ideal knot, hitch, or bend for that rope
Rhetoric: Being honest about your dreams in defiance of your parents
Rhetoric: Making creative small talk

Non-Skill Knowledge:
PC: Yrmellyn Cole
Yrmellyn Cole: Painter and artist
Yrmellyn Cole: Paints portraits of wealthy people for a living
Yrmellyn Cole: Painted you and your father as a real life scene


Yrmellyn

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A great read - as I've said before you have an attention to detail which makes your writing a real pleasure to review. The point regarding the final posts that I made to Pash applies to you both - and one very minor point - you talk about this being Ashan 2009, not 709. That made me giggle - but as always, beautiful writing, beautifully crafted.

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XP: 15

Fame: +7 (give a gift of time, give a gift of a painting and general chatter / being seen)

Loot

None

Knowledge

Skill Knowledge:
Detection: To assess the age of people by looking at them
Drawing: To sketch a framework of pale thin lines with a light hand
Painting: To paint shipbuilders at work
Painting: To paint with the intention of good wishes to people
Painting: The abstract idea to find a way to imbue paintings with properties beyond what meets the eye
Psychology: To cheer oneself up by taking a walk in the fresh air
Singing: To sing forgotten songs by filling in the lost words by humming
Socialization: To socialize with people while you are painting them

Non-Skill Knowledge:
Location: The docks of Ne’haer
PC: Pash Vy’Ryn, a nice young biqaj teenager, music lover and shipbuilder
PC: Pash Vy’Ryn, looking forward to travel with his ship
NPC: Traek Vy’Ryn, Pash’s father
Ships: The size and appearance of a Biqaj Sloop
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