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Hot cycle, Arc 704

His father had come to pick him up but his mother had told him to stay inside.

"Outside, Quiome," his father had said, and Yanaqi, his half-sister, had dragged him by the hand, wide-eyed, out the door.

The two children were sitting on the log pile stacked next to the house. It was hot out, a lazy day; Yanaqi chased a bug with her fingers, then caught it and let it crawl up to her elbow. It had been a while since father and Yanaqi had come, but they hadn't yet left for the city, and the adults were still inside the house.

Quiome could occasionally hear his mother shouting.

"Why?" he asked Yanaqi, and she shrugged her shoulders. The bug was skittering over her knuckles; she titled it from hand to hand.

"Your mom doesn't want you to go to the city."

"The city? Why?"

"Because it's where the people live."

"Oh."

He had seen the roads, seen the people going along with their horses and carts. Once he'd gone to the shore, seen the boats out on the water. He'd also spied on the neighbors when he could; mostly he just watched their houses, which were bigger but the same as Quiome's house, but sometimes the people came out to work in the fields. He observed them the same way he might watch an animal in the forest, trying to learn all he could.

So far what he had learned most was that people were different than animals, though they did most of the same things. But somehow people were... special.

He had also seen the city walls, but never the inside. To go to the city...

"I want to go," he said. "Yanaqi, let's go. I want to see the people."

"Tell your mother that," the girl said. The bug was cupped in her hands. She made the cage of her fingers smaller and smaller, until Quiome protested; then she opened her hands and let the bug go free. It buzzed its wings and flew off, into the sky. "It'll probably be eaten by a bird," Yana sighed. "And now I have nothing to do. Your mom sure can yell, can't she?"

"What do you think they're saying?" Quiome asked.

"They're arguing over you."

He didn't know what to say to that.

Eventually their father came out of the house, alone, and gestured for them to go. Yanaqi hopped off the wood and helped Quiome down, though he was more than old enough to do it himself, making sure he didn't fall. "Is mother coming?" he asked his father, but the older man just shook his head.

"Let's go, children," he said. "We have until light fall."

---

They had met two of his older brothers in the city --Vaas and Nulun-- and though Quiome was supposed to be greeting them he stared around in dumb amazement. They were in the city square. "Shut your mouth before a moth flies in," Yanaqi said, but she was beaming at him, pleased by his reaction.

"Look at all the people." He had never seen so many people. He had never imagined so many.

"Watch them," his father said. "Learn them."

The crystal family walked around for a short while, then found someplace to sit. Vaas, his oldest brother --so like his father in appearance and demeanor-- disappeared, only to return with food. Quiome took his portion --some sort of fried bread and fish-- and snacked away. He ate without looking at his food, afraid to blink and miss anything.

People really were different than animals, not the same at all. Special. Their food... they way they talked to each other, all the different voices, high and low, male and female.

And the children.

A little girl and some boys ran past with sticks for swords and Quiome was completely mesmerized by the sight of them. He watched them at their play, jaw slightly slack. Yanaqi tried to throw a piece of her bread into his open mouth but missed. Quiome hardly noticed. He hadn't thought about it, hadn't realized that in the city there would be other children; the only other person around his age that he had ever met was Yanaqi, and she was his sister and still two years older. Seeing the normal kids run and play was like looking in a mirror upside down.

"Join them," his father said from behind, and Quiome turned to him in wonder.

"I can... talk to them?" he asked. Had he ever talked to anyone outside of his family before?

"Just be careful," his father said. "Tell me what you learn."

---

It took courage. That was the first thing the crystal boy learned. A person had to be brave to introduce themselves to someone they didn't know.

He chose the girl because she was smaller and she smiled a lot. He really liked her smile; she had freckles on her nose and dimples in her cheeks. He waited until she was separated from her group of boys to come up. "U-Um," he said, holding out his hand like he'd seen the adults do. "I-I'm Q-- Q--"

He hadn't considered changing his name like his brothers and father did. He couldn't think of a new name that might fit him.

"Quiome," he finally said, knowing it was wrong to say, but in this case giving away his true name didn't feel bad. Especially not when the girl turned her smile to him.

"Jessa," she chirped in response, and tucked her stick under her arm to reach out and take his hand. "I don't think I know you? Are you from Ne'haer? You're not in my class."

"N-No, not exactly Ne'haer," Quiome stuttered. "My mother and I live out past the farms. I-I'm homeschooled."

"Homeschooled?" Jessa wrinkled her nose, frowning, though not as if she thought homeschooling was a bad thing. She squinted at him. "Is it just your mother and you, then?"

"Yes," he said. "Just us most the time. We don't come into the c-city."

"You don't have any friends?" He shook his head. The girl looked at him with pity. "That must be very lonely."

Lonely, he thought, weighing the word against everything he knew. Against memories of home. Lonely.

"Yes," he said after a moment, softer.

Jessa looked at him, perhaps waiting for him to say something else. "Well, do you want to play evil wizards with us, or what?" she eventually asked, with a grin.

"Wizards?" He was still thinking of his life out in the woods. He must not have heard her right. "I thought you were playing knights."

The girl gave him an odd look, and he realized he had just told her he'd been watching them play. He blushed and looked down.

"Well we were before..." she said slowly. Then in her regular chipper tone, "But we're playing wizards now. See this stick?" She whirled it out from under her arm, then spun the tip in a circle in the air. "It's a magic stick. It does magic stuff. You know the stuff, like mind magic, that sort of thing. Evil magic. Basically I'm the mind-control wizard. Whoever I tap with the stick has to do whatever I tell them. You know like--" she reached out and tapped him with the stick, "--now you can't walk, you can only jump!"

Quiome hesitated, and the girl tapped him again. "Jump, I said!" He began cautiously hopping.

"You've got it," Jessa said. "Now you're my minion. So come along, let's catch the others and make them eat dirt!" And off she ran.

Smiling hesitantly, Quiome followed.

---

He had been playing with the others for some time now and he had learned a lot. He had learned a few types of games (all of them, he noticed, had multiple players). He'd also learned things the other kids seemed to naturally know. Don't get in the way of adults. Older brothers and sisters can be mean. Other kids can be mean. There was one boy in particular who didn't seem to much like Quiome, no matter what he did. He was trying to figure out how he could get the boy to like him. That was another of father's lessons: gain their trust.

He thought he had an idea how to go about it.

"Jessa!" he called, and the girl bounded over. She brushed her sweaty hair out of her face. "Yes?"

His father was nearby and seemed to be paying attention. Quiome decided that this was not the place to be. Don't get in the way of adults, the others had taught him.

"I've got an idea about maybe something we could do? But I want to show you first before I show the others," he said, and she nodded and followed him off to a more secluded place.

"Okay, so watch this!" he said, and concentrated on the crystals that made up his hand.

As the girl looked on, the skin of his palm turned distinctly not-skin-colored. Now it had an opalescent gleam. "Quio--!" she gasped, and he said, trying to concentrate, "No, wait Jessa, this isn't it yet."

A few bits more and he had it. He turned his palm upwards a certain way. A beam of light caught in it, and a rainbow shone from his hand onto Jessa's awed face, like a prism of light off glass or water.

"Quiome," she whispered, "How can you do this?"

"It's magic," he said impressively, and then a hand crashed down on his shoulder and his arm was knocked out of place.

"We're leaving. Now," his father said, and dragged Quiome away, straight through the city --past his two brothers, who just watched them go like everyone else-- and out the gates. Yanaqi sprinted after them, not wanting to be left behind.

"I was just playing," the boy said breathlessly, but his father's expression didn't change. On his other side Yanaqi too was struggling to keep up with the adult's long-legged stride. She reached out and grabbed Quiome's other hand, looking at him with something like fear, and he held her hand back, tightly, not knowing what was going on.

The way to his home was a long way to be dragged by one arm, and by the time they reached the little cottage his shoulder was really hurting. He stumbled over a root and nearly fell and his father lifted him back to his feet.

From the door of the cottage, his mother cried out, "Quiome!" Suddenly she was wrenching him from his father's grasp. "Why are you back so early? What happened?" she demanded, and Yanaqi backed away from her, stunned by the woman's fearful tone. His father faced her impassively.

"He revealed what he was to a human child," was all the man said.

At once his mother was yelling. "I thought you said you would watch him! I knew
it-- I knew it! This is not a life for him."
Quiome had never seen her like this. She was so afraid. "I won't let you do it. I won't let you risk our son's life just for your family's cursed name--"

But here his father interrupted her. "Do not speak of the Eloquoi in such a manner," he said, quiet. But his voice was shiveringly cool.

His mother shut up at that. She didn't speak for a long moment. "Quiome," she finally said, "Take Yanaqi and go inside."

"Yanaqi will stay out here," their father commanded, and Yana looked between them, confused and frightened.

"Quiome!" his mother barked.

"I-I didn't mean to," he said, and his father reached out as if to grab him.

His mother stepped in the way.

"Quiome, inside, now! Say goodbye to Yanaqi and go!"

And still not knowing what was going on, he did as his mother told him.

---

Later, when his father and sister had gone, his mother sat him down and stared at him for a long time. She gently touched his cheek. He was crying.

"I want to go back to the city," he said. "I don't understand why we have to be alone. There was a girl there, Jessa, she was kind--"

"You will never go back there, Quiome," his mother said, wiping away at his tears. "Your father was wrong to take you there. You must learn from his mistakes, and mine, and now yours, and so remember this: people cannot be trusted. Your little friend may be kind, but she is not like you and me, and now she knows it. What you did today..." She brushed a hand at his hair, and he could feel that her hand was shaking. He took it in his own to still it. "You must never ever tell anyone what you are, my sweet boy. At the very least, your father and I agree on that."
"Speaking in Rakahi" "Speaking in Common" "Speaking in Ulehi"
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Cold cycle, Arc 705

It had been over an arc since he'd last been in the city, and Quiome wanted to go.

"Please, mama?" he asked in his sweetest, saddest voice.

"No," his mother said flatly. She was gathering her things.

"How are you going to walk all the way there by yourself?" the boy challenged.

"I will manage. You need to stay and do your chores--"

"I already did them!" Quiome objected.

"No, you haven't," his mother said, but she smiled.

"I just want to help you," he insisted. He burrowed under her arm so that it laid across his shoulders; he wrapped his own around her back. "See?" he said. "You can lean on me. Your ankle, mama... it could be broken... you shouldn't walk on it..."

"Yes, you just want to help me," the crystal woman said knowingly. "And if you just happen to see your friend again, little Jessa, it will only be an accident, won't it?"

That too.

Quiome hadn't stopped talking about the girl since the last time he'd seen her. He had dreams about her sometimes, and about other, faceless children. He couldn't help but talk about Jessa; he wanted to keep her alive in his mind. So he went on and on about how kind she had been, her dimples, her smile--

And the way she had said his name. Quiome. She had seen what he was, his true self, and had said his name with wonder. He knew it had been wonder. It hadn't been fear.

"I really just want to help you," he lied, and his mother shook her head in exasperation.

"Okay," she finally said, and he nearly leapt for joy. "But! You will stay by my side. Do you hear me, Quiome?" For he was shivering with happiness, his eyes alight. "By my side! And you will not talk to anyone!"

"Yes ma'am!" he said, and laughed, and hugged her, and still shaking her head
--and maybe laughing a little herself-- his mother hugged him back.

---

It was a long, slow, cold walk. When trial-last she had slipped on ice and twisted her leg, his mother had told him it was nothing, that she would be okay with a little rest. But the night had passed, and she had woken up to ugly bruises and swelling, and now it was clear from how she limped --and the fact that she was going to see a doctor at all-- that his mother was really hurting. "You okay?" the boy asked, more than once, and the woman smiled tightly and distracted him by pointing out a deer and fawn that chased by.

But sometimes she winced and leaned into his side, and he was glad --for more than one reason-- that she had let him come.

The city was everything he remembered, except better. There was a woman near the gates this day, singing out a soft, lilting song into the frozen air; he had never heard anyone sing so beautifully. He wished he had money to throw in her hat like the other people who passed by.

His mother seemed nervous, but hid it with a smile. Still, they went straight to the doctor's, and straight out again after his mother's leg was layered in soothing poultice and firmly wrapped. All in all they spent perhaps only half a break within the walls, and Quiome was sorely disappointed at having to leave so soon.

And then they were back at the gates, and the woman from before was still singing in her beautiful, breaking voice, and a small crowd of people had gathered around her now to watch. And in the crowd was a girl, perhaps a little taller than she had been before, with long legs and freckled cheeks pink from the cold and red-brown hair tied up under a scarf.

"Jessa!" Quiome called in his excitement at seeing her, and his mother shushed him, but it was too late. The girl looked over.

She was different, but mostly the same. Her smile was not as bright as he remembered it to be, but it didn't matter. The girl moved and Quiome thought for certain she was coming over, but then somehow she was lost, and she vanished into the crowd.

"Let's go now," his mother said.

"But just a moment! She was just there--"

"Now, Quiome," she said. "You promised me you would speak to no one."

And he could not refute that.

Still, he was heavy with sadness when they passed through the crowd and out the city gates.

---

They had been walking for a while now and were almost home when he saw it. He had been too busy sulking to notice before; he looked over, and his mother's face was tight.

At first he thought it was pain, and he opened his mouth to ask if she was alright. "Shh," she said, before he could speak, and he realized then that it was fear. She was afraid. He remembered vividly that day when she had argued with his father.

What's wrong? he wanted to ask, but then he heard it. The crunching of feet behind them.

"Don't look," his mother whispered, and he kept his face straight ahead even as a chill raced down his spine.

They were being followed.

It sounded like more than one pair of feet, though he could barely hear; the wind was picking up, whistling in his ears, covering the sound of boots on snow. The sun, feeble before, had been blown out. The sky was dark with an inrush of silver clouds from the east. The winter storm gathered itself overhead.

He desperately wanted to look behind, to see who was following, but his mother held him close to her side and he knew he shouldn't look.

Then the clouds broke overhead, and a torrent of rain and slush and snow came pounding down, and beside him his mother unwound from his side and grabbed his hand. "Now, Quiome!" she said, and then they were running, her with terrible limping strides, and he couldn't help but look back now, but whoever was following them was lost in the white flurry of the storm.

They made it. Somehow they made it. Quiome rushed ahead and threw open the door to their little cottage, and his mother came slipping inside. She fell immediately onto her bed, clutching at her leg, white-faced. "The fire," she hissed, and he shut the door, fingers trembling on the lock, and went over to where the coals burned low. They had left a couple of logs on to keep the house warm; now his mother instructed him to remove them from the embers. He did, careful not to burn his hands. "So if the storm clears, they won't see the smoke," she said in that low, urgent voice, and Quiome had never felt so afraid. He went over to his mother's bed and hugged close to her, shuddering, his heartstone pulsing rapidly inside his chest.

Later, when it seemed they were safe and Quiome had gathered all their bed covers together so they might keep warm in the night, he said, his voice tremulous and betraying, "It's my fault, isn't it? You were right. Jessa-- I shouldn't have called out to her-- I shouldn't have shown her, before--"

"No, shush," his mother said, holding him close. "We cannot help what we are."
"Speaking in Rakahi" "Speaking in Common" "Speaking in Ulehi"
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It was not seven trials later that the men found the house.

Quiome was outside when they came. He was supposed to be chopping wood but he was poor with the ax; he kept swinging and missing the center of the log. His mother usually chopped while Quiome stacked the wood halves by the side of the house. Today, however, she was inside, still resting her bad ankle, and so the task had fallen to him.

He had just brought the ax down --missing again and shaving off a too-small
piece-- when he heard someone shout. "Boy!" He looked up. A group of men were approaching the house. He counted six of them in all.

"Yes?" he asked, and suddenly his hands felt nervous. He had never seen these men before; they weren't neighbors. And besides, they had never had visitors over. "W-What do you want?"

"We'd like to speak to your mother," one of them said, the one in the lead, and Quiome hesitated a long moment, two, before calling for her inside the house.

Still limping heavily, his mother came to the door.

"Quiome, what--?" she asked, and then froze at the sight of the men.

"Inside the house," she said at once, and the lead man stepped forward with his hands held up. "No need to be afraid ma'am," he said, "We just have a few questions."

"Quiome, inside!"

"I think he should stay out here," the man said mildly, and stepped forward again.

At his approach, Quiome held up the ax, backing up; another of the men cracked a smile and deliberately stepped towards him.

"No," his mother said, and hobbled out of the house to stand between the men and boy. She took the ax from her son's hands and faced the men... and then she hesitated, and very carefully set it down near her foot. "We don't mean you any harm," the woman said, holding out her hands like the man had before.

He was still coming forward, ever so slowly, his eyes now flicking from the prone ax to the woman's face. "We've heard some stories about you--" he said quietly. "Not good things, I'm afraid."

"I think there's been some confusion," Quiome's mother said, her voice even. "I assure you my boy and I have done nothing wrong. We live outside the city, peacefully; we rarely enter. I don't know what you heard, but--"

"My daughter told me your boy was hanging around the city a while back. Said he shone some strange lights in her face. Wicked lights, from his hands. Magic, she said." Another step forward. He was so close now. Quiome wanted to run back but his mother stood still and he would not leave her. The man's tone grew angry. "Your kid tried to use magic on my little girl. Do you know how afraid she was?" he asked, and he was close enough now that Quiome could read something ugly
--maybe fear-- in the man's own eyes.

"I didn't," the boy protested from behind his mother, and though she tried to stop him he added, "J-Jessa, you mean? She's my friend. We played together, that's all. She--"

"You should not have even looked at her!" the man said, almost a shout. He paused, face twitching as if trying to control himself. "You bewitched my little girl. I know what you are."

"I didn't!" Quiome said, but it was too late.

The man stepped forward once more, this time swinging his arm. His fist hit Quiome's mother in the belly and she let out a gasp; it shunted up and to the left, as if aiming for the heart. Only when he pulled away did Quiome see the knife in his hand. His mother was holding her hands to her belly and he saw it was bleeding, bleeding false blood, but then her hands moved and he saw a burst of bright light through her fingers. "Quiome, run," she panted out, huddling over her wound.

But he couldn't. He couldn't. She wobbled backwards and he caught at her clothes, trying to keep her up; they both went slowly to the ground.

"Please, no. Please stop, help," the boy said dumbly, staring down, pressing his hands over his mother's. She was staring up at him with an ashen face.

"Maybe we shouldn't-- not the kid--" one of the men said, but no one seemed to hear him.

"Be a good boy," another said to Quiome, stalking forward, the one who had smiled at him before, and then the man was upon him.

---

Quiome blinked. He was stumbling through the woods. His belly ached like he was going to be sick. His face felt hot and sore. There were the sounds of crashing and tearing behind him.

Someone was at his back, prodding him with something sharp, poking him forward. "Just a little bit further," the man crooned in his ear. When Quiome looked over his shoulder he caught a glimpse of the house, the door hanging open, busted. The rest of the men seemed to have broken inside. His mother lay still in a heap upon the muddy ground.

The boy turned his face forward again and stumbled on. "That's a good boy," the man cooed behind him. "Just keep walking."

Quiome's face hurt. His head felt filled with smoke. All he knew was the pounding of his heartstone, telling him danger, danger. But he couldn't think past it. What was he doing? What was he supposed to be doing? He vaguely remembered his mother telling him to run.

Run, was that what he should do?

Run. He tried to get away.

But the man was ready; Quiome only got a step before a rough hand was catching around his arm, pulling him back. The knife was there. It sliced into his skin and the boy whimpered. Pain. Panic. Heartstone. Run. Run. He began to fight the man's grip but it was no good; he fought harder, twisting like a snake, trying to spin away. "Kid, stop!" But he didn't stop, and the knife was still there; as he wrenched sideways it dug into him, carving a jagged ribbon into his side, all the way to his belly. Quiome screamed in pain, doubling over.

"Hold still!" the man snarled, pulling the weapon back, and that was it. Quiome yanked backwards and broke free, stumbling to the ground. The man was immediately over him, arms reaching; the boy kicked out a leg, hitting him in the face. The man let out a bellow. Quiome rolled over and scrambled up to his feet. The tear in his side was burning, stretching, but he pressed an arm to it and ran, darting away into the nearby woods.

"Stop!" the man shouted, but the boy was already gone.

---

At some point he must have fallen unconscious; now Quiome muzzily blinked open his eyes.

He tried to remember what was going on, why he hurt. There were images in his mind of him racing through the trees. The sound of heavy breathing behind him. Being chased. He thought at one point he had nearly gotten caught, he remembered that the man had been faster than him. But he had somehow slipped away. He had run, the pain an aching stitch that cut deep into his side. Eventually he could not bear it any longer. He had stopped, and hidden.

Now he was crammed into what he thought was an abandoned coyote den, pressed as deep in as he could go. He must have been sleeping before; he didn't know how much time had passed, just that the shadows were deeper. Something had woken him: the sound of smashing in the forest nearby. Quiome didn't want to move to see what it was. He was cold. So cold. His fingers didn't want to work right; his feet felt like ice. The injured side of him was crusted in dark blood, his clothes sticky, itchy on the wound.

He didn't want to move, he really didn't... but he smelled something --smoke-- and his instincts clamored. Groaning low in his throat, Quiome scooted on his good side out of the den, keeping low to the ground.

Off in the distance the trees flickered, some of them caught ablaze. Fire. That way was his home. Panic rising again, the boy limped around on numb feet, wanting to get nearer-- no, wanting to run away; he didn't know what to do. And close, close by, there was the sound of footsteps, muttering, branches being broken.

He knew it was the man. Still looking for him.

Quiome ducked down as low as he could get, crawling along the snowy forest floor. He tried to make his way around the man, tried to stay out of sight, but it was hard: he was tired, he was shaking, and his eyes had started watering from tears and smoke and pain. His side hurt so badly. Everything was wrong. Even his head felt wrong, too full of fear and loss. Confused. Angry. He was so cold. There was the fire, far off. Burning. He kept seeing his mother lying on the ground. Still. She had been so still. How would she run away?

Openly weeping now, the boy scooped up a rock, snuck as close as he dared, and hurled it at the man's head.

Somehow it struck true.

The guy recoiled from the blow and the boy dashed forward and shoved him as hard as he could, knocking him to the ground, scrabbling atop him for the knife that was now at his belt. He got it. The man grabbed onto him and rolled them over, Quiome crushed beneath him. "Ha!" he said, and then the boy plunged the knife into his stomach, and the man screamed.

But he was still on top of him, refusing to let go.

Quiome mashed his hand against the man's belly and the guy finally wrenched back, howling with pain; the boy was able to slither out from underneath him. He wobbled up to his feet but the man refused to quit, lunging at him wildly; he kicked out at him, hitting him again in his belly, and the man fell forward, retching. Quiome kicked him again, feeling so sick, so sick and angry, but he kept kicking, kicking until the man gave up, flopped on the ground, gasping like a fish. There was blood in the snow.

Shaking, the boy climbed atop the man, sitting on his chest to hold him down, and brought the knife to rest against his throat.

Terrible eyes stared up at Quiome, and they looked at each other for a long time. "Please, don't," the man rasped out, and the boy pressed the blade in deeper, drawing a line of blood. The man choked and went quiet.

"Why?" Quiome asked, still hurting, still sick, his eyes still weeping fresh tears. "Why? Why?" But the man would not answer.

He thought about killing him. "You hurt my mother," the boy said, but the man remained silent.

Eventually the child pulled away. He got up off him, full of despair, and tossed the knife into the dirt. He vanished back into the forest.

---

It was nearing night by the time the men left. Several of them had looked for Quiome in the trees but hadn't found him, and he had watched as they dragged their injured friend away.

Slowly, limping, the boy returned to his home.

When he saw the blackened ruins of the little cottage he couldn't help but cry out. He pressed a hand to his mouth, trying to muffle the sound, afraid the men might hear and come back and find him. Snow and ash fell in equal parts from the sky, dancing down onto his hair, his shoulders. Looking at the destruction, he felt he couldn't stand. For a long while he crouched down, not looking at the wreckage, staring at the ground, at his feet, trying to get a hold of himself, trying to think what to do.

But his mind kept going back to one thing: he had no home now. He had no home. He had no home.

He was alone.

Alone.

The boy stood, hardly able to keep to his feet, but he had to do something. He began to search. He looked around the woods. Nothing. Nothing. He tried to go into the remains of the house but was unable, it was still so hot; he nearly burned his feet trying, again and again, until he finally realized he couldn't. He couldn't.

His mother was nowhere to be seen.

There was nothing for it. For him. Not a thing for him to do. Not a thing that would make this better.

His mother was gone.

Eventually the boy found a place near the embers to lie down, digging out a hole in the snow, the heat of his burned house keeping him warm enough in that cold, dark night. He closed his eyes and went to sleep. In the morning the house was still destroyed, his mother was still gone. He sat and waited, huddled in on himself from the cold, from pain. He waited. He waited.

He would wait until his mother returned.
"Speaking in Rakahi" "Speaking in Common" "Speaking in Ulehi"
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Knowledge:
The Obvious Differences Between Humans And Animals
Don't Get In The Way of Adults
Most Siblings Are Mean
Jessa: Quiome's First Friend
Jessa: Kind and Sweet
Yludih: Never Show Them What You Are
Yludih: Gain Their Trust
Ne'haer: Bustling City of Prosperity
Jessa's Father: Murderer of Quiome's Mother
Endurance: Adrenaline Helps To Survive
Ranged Combat: The Art of Rock Throwing
Unarmed Combats: Better Odds When They're Caught Off Guard
Melee Combat: Stabbing With A Knife
Field Craft: Finding Shelter Is Imperative To Survival


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Injuries: Knife wound from the back to the front, along the ribs.
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Comment: I seriously enjoyed this thread immensely. It's so sad and heart wrenching because Quio is a child, young and innocent and naive of the horrible world around him. I also feel a little mad at his mother for sheltering him so much. But she met a sad ending and then I was just depressed. You wrote this thread very well and it kept my attention until the very end. The ending was a great finisher too and a lovely subtle cliffhanger. I can't wait to see what more will come from this, if more does? I hope we get to see Quio confront Jessa at some point in his life! That would be a very intense conversation.
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