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[Hinata]

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[Doran]

Hinata:

Knowledge:
Persuasion 1
Meditation 2

Loot:
Lost: -
Wealth: -
Injuries: -
Renown: -
Magic XP: -
Skill Review: Appropriate to level.
Points: 10

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Comments: Hinata seems to be quite a hard-working young woman. I found it interesting that she got a job while her friends went on a trip rather than doing something entertaining herself. I remember the last park thread. I wonder why those parks are always so dirty. Someone should do something about all those people just throwing their trash on the ground!

Hinata’s cleaning up the park and her reaction to its sorry state was described in quite some detail. I appreciate that she didn’t only clean up the park itself, but also decided to get rid of all the trash floating in the pond. I like how she actually talked to the water and persuaded it to help her, and I appreciate that you made it obvious that she struggled.

I thought that your stating that Hinata had next to no meditation sounded odd though. It sounded more like something that you would say OOCly. That could have been worded better in my opinion.

The magic use in this thread here was much more appropriate than in the previous one. Encouraging a small pond’s worth of water to flow where desired is something that a Competent Defier is capable off according to the Defiance writeup.

Until you have demonstrated that you are indeed able to play a Competent-level mage, you will not be awarded Magic XP or Knowledges though, according to this intervention.

With that being said, enjoy your rewards, and let me know if you have any questions, please!

P.S.: I would have added “Gardening” to the list of skills used as Hinata took care of the flowers and patted the dirt back over the seeds and watered them, among other things