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Book hunt for beginners
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Book hunt for beginners
Last edited by Amaterasu on Tue Dec 08, 2020 5:04 pm, edited 3 times in total. word count: 11
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Re: Book hunt for beginners
Amaterasu
Experience: 10 these points may not be used for magic xp
Knowledge:
Persuasion 1
running 1
stealth 1
Attuning note ink
Attuning 2
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Skill Usage: appropriate to level
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Comments: Looking for some overdue books I see. Hopefully the library appreciates Amaterasu's hardwork.
Some parts of this seemed rushed and summarized again, with details such as the old woman's tirade toward the end being more told via summary with minimal detail, instead of given dialogue. You narrated that the woman provided comic relief at the end, but then didn't show us how.
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