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Review Request 2.1.3

Postby Lei'lira » Fri Feb 23, 2018 5:40 pm

Rewards Requested

Thread Name: All the Pretty Little Horses
City/Area: Andaris, Rynmere
Notes/Warnings: My apologies in advance for the length of this thread. Originally this was supposed to be a short shopping trip, but I didn't factor in the information Lei'lira would need to learn in order to make her decision on which horses to buy. This would have been better as 2-3 threads, but it takes place in a previous season, and I don't have enough extra place holders to allow for that.
Requested Rewards:
Knowledge: (A list of knowledge)

Skill Knowledge

Animal Husbandry: Horse; different breeds can have vastly different qualities
Animal Husbandry: Horse Breed; Apanie come in buckskin, palomino, bay, black, chestnut, and grey with a natural metallic sheen to their coat, stand 14.2 to 16 hh, and are used for riding, show jumping, scouting, and hunting. They have a refined head with a predominantly straight or slightly convex profile and long ears, their mane and tail are usually sparse, and their long back is both lightly muscled, and coupled to a flat croup and long, upright neck. Their temperament tends to be excitable and restless, so they can be difficult to control. They are a desert breed that is somewhat common in the Hotlands. But they are most well known for their "sixth-sense" when it comes to detecting predators and enemies. Possible due to their long ears, it is believed that they use vibrations in the air to know when a threat approaches.
Animal Husbandry: Horse Breed; Etan Ponies are usually either chestnut or gray, stand 13 to 13.5 hh, and are used for short burst riding, and packing. They are not the most attractive of creatures, having heavy heads, and short, thick necks. And if ridden, they are quite slow. But they are able to carry heavy weight very well and for long distances. They are a desert breed that is somewhat common in the Hotlands. Their most notable quality is that they can go three trials or longer without water and require virtually no care.
Animal Husbandry: Horse Breed; Neeraja are usually bay, gray, chestnut, black, and roan, stand 14.1 to 15.1 hh, and are used for riding, show jumping, and dressing. They have refined, wedge-shaped heads and a peculiar broad forehead. Most show a distinctive concave, or "dished" profile. They are noted for both their intelligence and a spirited disposition. They are a desert breed that is somewhat rare in the Hotlands. Their most notable quality is an abnormal organ in their foreheads which allows the Neeraja to detect sources of water from as far as 300ft away.
Animal Husbandry: Horse Breed; Namib are usually bay, chestnut or dun, stand 14 to 14.3 hh, and are used for riding, packing, racing, and combative purposes. They are athletic, muscular, have clean limbs, and are strong boned. They are short-backed with oblique shoulders, have good withers and good conformation. The Namib are one of the native wild horse breeds of the Hotlands. As such, they are feral, and spirited. They are incredibly hard to train, but once you do, they become the fiercest of all mounts. They are a desert breed that is quite rare in the Hotlands. Their most notable quality is their coat. It is an odd combination of tough hide and a semi-permeable membrane. Their skin is hard to cut, giving it an asset in combat with members of its own kind, or as a war mount. It is also breathable, allowing the Namib a tremendous resistance to the scorching climates of the Hotlands.Business Management: buying superior quality that is too young for your immediate needs over lesser quality that can be bred immediately
Business Management: buying superior quality that is too young for your immediate needs over lesser quality that can be bred immediately
Business Management: unless specializing, being able to cater to as wide a market as possible is important
Mount: Horse; it is a good idea to test ride a horse you want to use as a mount before buying it
Mount: Horse; good gaits are important in a mount
Mount: Horse; riding through a crowd
Mount: Horse; in a first mount, speed is not an asset
Mount: Horse; the proper way to introduce yourself to a strange horse
Mount: Horse; trust between horse and rider is of utmost importance

Non Skill Knowledge

Lei'lira: hopes to create her own breed of horses one trial
Lei'lira: won't tolerate the abuse of an animal
Lei'lira: is easy to read

Common: slang


Language: Common Sign
Common Sign: "spoken" with gestures
Common Sign: useful for street kids, and hunters


Language: Dehasin
Dehasin: one of two languages spoken in Athart
Dehasin: spoken by human slaves in Athart
Dehasin: the only language specifically for slaves
Dehasin: is a hard language to learn; many slavers don't understand it
Dehasin: swears
Dehasin: lullaby


Language: Lorien
Lorien: one of two languages spoken in Athart
Lorien: spoken by the Avriel


Location: Athart
Athart: city of the Avriel
Athart: city of slavery

Location: Eastern Settlements

Location: Oakleigh
Oakleigh: origin of the Oakleigh Destrier


Loot: none
Injuries/Overstepping: none
Fame: Positive for doing good deeds - stopping a theft, helping a couple of kids, giving a slave some water, stopping a runaway horse in a crowed stockyard, and helping the same two kids a second time. Also spending as many nels as she is on horses may earn her a positive reputation as well - among the merchants at least.
Collaboration: No
Magic EXP: No

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Review Request 2.1.3

Postby Lei'lira » Fri Feb 23, 2018 11:48 pm

Rewards Requested

Thread Name: Changes
City/Area: Rynmere, Andaris
Notes/Warnings: This is an old joint thread. I am adjusting it a bit to end it here since I don't think it will ever be finished otherwise.
Requested Rewards:
Knowledge:
Skill Knowledge
Caregiving: knowing when sleep is the best remedy
Caregiving: leaving the room with the little one so the injured child can sleep
Caregiving: recognizing when your child is hungry
Cooking: good, hearty food can be comforting
Endurance: taking strength from the familiar
Etiquette: when someone introduces themselves, it is rude not to offer your own name in return
Meditation: is supposed to calm the mind, and help you to focus
Meditation: has many different techniques; some simple, others more complex
Meditation: Technique; slow, deep breaths
Meditation: doesn't always work

Non Skill Knowledge

Saikuru: also called Farmer's friend
Saikuru: makes it easier for a farmer to breed their livestock
Saikuru: often used when an heir is needed
Saikuru: has a sweet, pleasant flavor

Lei'lira: thinks Drayas drugged her with Saikuru to get her pregnant
Lei'lira: fears she may be pregnant again

Elyna Burhan: a noble
Elyna Burhan: knows Lazuli
Elyna Burhan: mother of Elise
Elyna Burhan: pregnant again
Elyna Burhan: chose to deny an arranged marriage and face life without her family
Elyna Burhan: wants to be friends

Teirue: curious about Elise

Angry people are dangerous people
Power is dangerous

Loot: none
Injuries/Overstepping: none
Fame: Positive for helping an elderly woman
Collaboration: Yes
Magic EXP: No

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Medals: 18
Story of the Month (1) World Developer (1) Painting With Words (1) Supporter (1)
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Legend In Waiting (1) Vhalar 716 (1) Holiday Event 2016 (1) Cylus 717 Thread Challenge (1)
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Review Request 2.1.3

Postby Vega » Sat Feb 24, 2018 9:06 am

Rewards Requested

Thread Name: Unfamiliar Steps
City/Area: Scalvoris
Notes/Warnings: Aegis to review, please
Requested Rewards:


Vega

Knowledge:
Climbing: Slipping on ice and stones
Climbing: Mountains have many hidden obstacles
Dancing: Dance can be a warm up of it's own
Dancing: Consider movements between the beat, not just on it
Discipline: Keeping your own voice in the cacophany
Meditation: Achieving a state of calm, even when in fear

Loot: None
Injuries/Overstepping: N/A
Fame: Nope
Collaboration: Nope
Magic EXP: no

 ! Aegis wrote:
Dibs due to Scalvoris event plot line

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Medals: 16
Supporter (1) One Arc Later... (1) Living Legend (1) Pioneer (1)
...ow. (1) First Love (1) First Kiss (1) Immortal Lover (1)
Dreamer (1) Party Animal (1) Legend In Waiting (1) Lol Worthy (2)
Cylus 717 Thread Challenge (1) Cylus 717 PC/Dev Challenge (1) Cylus 717 All Star (1)

Review Request 2.1.3

Postby Vega » Sun Feb 25, 2018 9:32 am

Rewards Requested

Thread Name: Hammer Time!
City/Area: Scalvoris
Notes/Warnings: No
Requested Rewards:[/googlefont]

Levana

Knowledge:
Endurance; Drinking water to keep yourself hydrated.
Endurance; Working in the bitter cold.
Endurance; Working Through Pain.
Discipline; Staying busy to keep warm.
Strength; Lift Using Your Legs
Strength; Walking With Post Above Head.
Tactics; Two people are stronger then one
Deception; Giving A False Name
Leadership; Knowing When To Accept Help
Leadership; Working Together To Complete A Task
Leadership; Finding The Goal To Rally Behind.

Loot: None
Injuries/Overstepping: N/A
Fame: Positive for helping out after the storm (+10 on Scalv calendar)
Collaboration: yes
Magic EXP: no


Vega

Knowledge:
Psychology: Giving advice
Psychology: People are weird.
Storytelling: Analogies to tell a moral
Storytelling: (Auto)biographies can help build relationships
Strength: Use tools to assist difficult tasks
Strength: Put your strength into a difficult task in order to lessen the burden
Strength: Application of strength can be as much about balance

Loot: Nope
Injuries/Overstepping: Nope
Fame: Helped out (as above)
Collaboration: yes
Magic EXP: no

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Dreamer (1) Party Animal (1) Legend In Waiting (1) Lol Worthy (2)
Cylus 717 Thread Challenge (1) Cylus 717 PC/Dev Challenge (1) Cylus 717 All Star (1)

Review Request 2.1.3

Postby Kovic » Sun Feb 25, 2018 9:48 am

Rewards Requested

Thread Name: Behind closed doors viewtopic.php?f=169&t=10350
City/Area: AA cavern, Etzos
Notes/Warnings: Some violence, very very mild
Requested Rewards:

Ryder

Knowledge:

Unarmed: Choke hold
Unarmed: Winding someone
Unarmed: Hitting a man’s ‘weak’ spot
Unarmed: Using your elbow
Unarmed: Finishing off a weakened opponent
Unarmed: Knocking a man out
Endurance: Taking a kick
Endurance: Ignoring nausea in a fight

Loot: No
Injuries/Overstepping: Possible, some bruises.
Fame: Negative
Collaboration: Yes

Kovic

Knowledge:

Rhetoric: Exposition
Leadership: Masking orders as suggestions
Persuation: Asking politely
Detection: Leaning by watching
Unarmed Combat: Dirty Fighting
Tactics: Identifying fighting styles
Negotiation: Pre-meditate the terms of an offer
Leadership: Exploiting employees

Ryder: Works for Al'Angyryl
Ryder: Will (secretly) work for you
Ryder: A vicious fighter
Ryder: Prideful
Ryder: Will most likely want payback

Loot: No
Injuries/Overstepping: None
Fame: Negative
Collaboration: Yes

Magic EXP: Hell no

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Posts: 383
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Renown: -108
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Medals: 14
Character of the Month (1) Peer Reviewer (1) Artíst (1) Painting With Words (1)
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Review Request 2.1.3

Postby Kovic » Sun Feb 25, 2018 9:54 am

Rewards Requested

Thread Name: A City of Villains and Lies viewtopic.php?f=169&t=5315
City/Area: Etzos
Notes/Warnings: It's a big ass thread.
Requested Rewards:
Knowledge: Nothin' but my points

Loot: None for me
Injuries/Overstepping: No
Fame: Negative because I'm like a demon from the ghostbuster movie. Hate makes me stronger
Collaboration: As I said, it's a big ass thread. Most of Etzos was there. I kinda poofed before the thread was finished, but I do have three posts or so and I want me points. Most of the others got their grades, so you don't need to read it whole (even if it's a good thread overall)
Magic EXP: Not for me


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Medals: 14
Character of the Month (1) Peer Reviewer (1) Artíst (1) Painting With Words (1)
Guild Master (1) Mentor (1) One Arc Later... (1) Pioneer (1)
Murderer (1) Scandalous (1) Legend In Waiting (1) Lol Worthy (3)

Review Request 2.1.3

Postby Kovic » Sun Feb 25, 2018 10:00 am

Rewards Requested

Thread Name: These Nuts viewtopic.php?f=169&t=6744
City/Area: Etzos
Notes/Warnings: An abandoned, pointless read.
Requested Rewards: I just want my points, thanks
Knowledge: none
Loot: nope
Injuries/Overstepping: (noooope
Fame: If you could squeeze in some negative, I'd appreciate it, but I don't think so, no.
Collaboration: Yes, with Fridgar. This thread was gonna be dope, but Fridgar bailed, so... I've got the 1,5k words, but I've only got 2 posts, so I think this is worth 10 points instead of 15? I dunno, you know better, dearest grader.
Magic EXP:No

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Medals: 14
Character of the Month (1) Peer Reviewer (1) Artíst (1) Painting With Words (1)
Guild Master (1) Mentor (1) One Arc Later... (1) Pioneer (1)
Murderer (1) Scandalous (1) Legend In Waiting (1) Lol Worthy (3)

Review Request 2.1.3

Postby Arlo Creede » Sun Feb 25, 2018 12:33 pm

Rewards Requested

Thread Name: Distance
City/Area: Scalvoris
Notes/Warnings: No
Requested Rewards:


Arlo

Knowledge:
Discipline: Not jumping to conclusions
Discipline: Simply saying it how it is, time and again.
Persuasion: Having an absolute bottom line and not moving from it
Persuasion: Logical, factual statements about your behaviour.
Persuasion: Encouragement works
Storytelling: Putting together two stories to make a larger one
Storytelling: Trying to persuade via a story

Mark Ability: Sojourn: Safe Camp: Requires blood and concentration
Mark Ability: Sojourn: Safe Camp: A safe, warm space

Loot: None
Injuries/Overstepping: N/A
Fame: Helping, refusing to leave.
Collaboration: yes
Magic EXP: no



Vega

Knowledge:
Discipline: Managing emotions when exhausted is difficult.
Discipline: Keeping distance from a loved one to protect them
Discipline: Keeping hope even when it's desperate
Endurance: Staying awake through exhaustion
Endurance: Fighting exhaustion is more difficult when warm and comfortable
Meditation: Focusing on a point
Meditation: Being confident that your surroundings are safe aids focus
Meditation: Hopefulness is helpful
Psychology: Making an emotional plea when being a stubborn and obnoxious person hasn't worked
Storytelling: The tale of Vega and the Fire Demon


Loot: Nope
Injuries/Overstepping: Nope
Fame: Nope
Collaboration: yes
Magic EXP: no

 ! Aegis wrote:
Ill take this one due to Scalvoris Event plot
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Profession: Traveler
Renown: +408
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Medals: 13
Story of the Month (1) Peer Reviewer (1) Painting With Words (1) One Arc Later... (1)
Living Legend (1) Hallowed (1) First Love (1) Dreamer (1)
Party Animal (1) Lol Worthy (2) Crush The Reviews! 717 (1) Event Medal (1)

Review Request 2.1.3

Postby Linika » Sun Feb 25, 2018 4:06 pm

Rewards Requested

Thread Name: Maris and Janis: Hunters Lost
City/Area: Viden
Notes/Warnings: Nah, nothing disturbing
Requested Rewards: 9 - a collaborative with 4 Linika posts.
Skill-Based Knowledge:
  • Alchemy: How to Make Frostbane Poison
  • Alchemy: Reversal Reagents: Usually an Anti-toxin
  • Alchemy: Tendrilshroom: A Source of a Reversal Reagent
  • Alchemy: Tendrilshroom Numbs Flesh
  • Alchemy: Tendrilshroom: The Tendrils Have the Actual Reagent
  • Detection: An Unexpected Speech Pattern Can be Suspicious
  • Investigation: Act Suspicious and Note What Others Ask You
  • Medicine: Don't Try to Insulate a Frostbane Victim From the Cold
  • Stealth: A Naer in a Shadowed Doorway

Non-Skill Knowledges:
  • PC: Yolande
  • NPC: Kala Avilstone: Frostbane Victim
  • NPC: Suspicious Intern at the Infirmary

Loot: Nothing
Injuries: Nothing
Fame: Maybe some positive. People DID see her bring the victim in
Collaboration: Yes
Magic EXP: No
Additional Notes:Evangelina dropped out right off.
Yolande's last post was Nov. 16.
I PMed her twice, the first time she responded, the second time she did not.
She did not add any posts either time, so I finished and submitted it.

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Location: Viden
Race: Naerikk
Profession: Apothecary
Renown: +74
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Partner
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Medals: 7
Painting With Words (1) Alpha Testing (1) Beta Bot (1) One Arc Later... (1)
Pioneer (1) Ymiden 716 (1) Holiday Event 2016 (1)

Review Request 2.1.3

Postby Tio Silver » Sun Feb 25, 2018 4:54 pm

Rewards Requested

Thread Name: Hit Me With Your Best Shot
City/Area: Scalvoris
Notes/Warnings: Violence
Requested Rewards:

Knowledge:
Endurance: Taking a harsh beating
Endurance: The pain of a broken face
Strength: Punching a strong person
Strength: Getting in an underground fight match
Unarmed Combat (Brawling): Using anger in a fight
Unarmed Combat (Brawling): Beginning a fight by circling your opponent
Unarmed Combat (Brawling): Slapping yourself to psych yourself up
Unarmed Combat (Brawling): Charging forwards
Unarmed Combat (Brawling): Dodging a attempted grab
Unarmed Combat (Brawling): Headbutting someone in the nose
Unarmed Combat (Brawling): Minimising damage from a shoulder barge
Unarmed Combat (Brawling): Kneeing someone in the stomach
Unarmed Combat (Brawling): Attacking the head with a hammer blow
Unarmed Combat (Brawling): Don't get cocky near the end of a fight


Loot: As Tio embraced his furious side and put on a show, can I get some more Sesser powers for this?
Injuries/Overstepping: A whole lotta bruises.
Renown: Slight - For loosing a minor fighting contest
Collaboration: Yes
Magic EXP: No

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Posts: 646
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Race: Yludih
Profession: Pirate Captain
Renown: +357
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Medals: 5
Story of the Month (1) Helper (1) Painting With Words (1) Lol Worthy (1)
Event Medal (1)

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