[Venora] The Travesty of Coincidence [Kyon]

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[Venora] The Travesty of Coincidence [Kyon]

Postby Faith » Mon Aug 29, 2016 7:45 pm

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Peer Reviewed: Rewards!

Alistair

Points!:
Story: 3/5
Collaboration: 5/ 5
Structure: 5/ 5

Knowledge:
Basic
Medicine: Using body temperature to determine the time of death.
Corrosion: Can be used to remove rot from corpses
Necromancy: a way of achieving balance for you
Detection: Watching in the distance for movement can yield results in open spaces.
Horse Riding: Galloping on rough terrain is painful on your bottom.
Tactics: Sizing up the enemy often means a battle is won or lost before it is begun
Tactics: Telling complete strangers you are a necromancer is a Really Bad Idea
Red cordelia: Represents House Languedoc.
Gaston Languedoc & Guillaime Languedoc: Sons of the house

Specialised
Medicine: The process of putrefication
Guillaime Languedoc: assassinated


Loot: Signet ring: Red Cordelia, Corpse of a Dead Lord
Fame: Act of Magic (-2), Break a Law (-2)
Overview:
General comments. This thread caught my attention for a number of reasons - I was intrigued at Alistair telling his deepest secret to an absolute stranger, taking him at his word that he was a noble lord (which for the purposes of the review, he wasn't) and admitting to all sorts of acts. I was left wondering why Alistair would do that, honestly, but might well have found out if the thread had been finished.

Story I have deducted points for story as it is literally unfinished, so the story is not told. I was interested to see how it would have played out, though.
Structure All fine no worries!

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