• Mature • [Krome]First day on the job

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There are a number of satellite villages in Rynmere, each overseen by a Duke of one of the seven noble families, and all ultimately controlled by the King of Rynmere.

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• Mature • [Krome]First day on the job

Postby Rita Fenyo » Mon Jul 18, 2016 3:16 pm

46 Ymiden 716


Stillness. Silence. The light of dawn lazily shifting it’s way up through the shutters of the bedroom window. Chirping of morning birds broke this stillness, an Ithecal rising from her slumber breaking the stillness. A yawn and a stretch, slowly rolling out of the blankets, making her way to the toilet and taking care of business. Hot water steamed into the bath, Rita sinking down into the warm cleansing embrace. Sandalwood today. Cleaned up and ready for the day she got into something comfortable and, cautiously, made her way down stairs. A smile, lighting the fire under the cooker and getting together bacon and eggs with fresh bread for breakfast. Kettle on to boil with her favorite tea. A knock on the door gathered her attention, slithering over and unbolting the door.
“Ah hello lassie, good to see you out of bed on such a beautiful mornin’” She beamed and hugged her friend.
“Hello Eoghan, good to see you too. Come in I just lit the stove.”
“Nothing beats the smell of woodsmoke and fresh food in the morning.” slithering back into the kitchen, stove hot, cracking the egg open into the pan and then the bacon. Pleasant aroma filling the house.
“Mixed spice will go lovely on that” She laughed and playfully nudged her friend.
“Well cook it yourself next time”

He smiled and backed away, in mock surrender.
“Fine, fine, I’m just the best cook in all of Krome. Not like my opinion matters” She smiled putting the food on a plate, blushing slightly.
“Shut up, are not.”
“Oh a competition in order lassie. Well we’ll see who’s best” She smiled and gave him the plate.
“Here you go eat up, though you consume enough to supply a large army.” a sly grin as he was lost for words.
“Uh that’s just rude “ Both of them laughing. BANG BANG BANG. Both of them went silent. BANG BANG BANG
“HELP PLEASE HELP!” Rita rushed past opening the door. There was blood everywhere, two young men carrying an older man with a deep gash in his leg.
“Ms Rita, please” She pointed to the medical table
“Put him there kindly, Eoghan can you get the cauterising iron ready for me. Boys could you open the shutters for me”
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[Krome]First day on the job

Postby Rita Fenyo » Tue Jul 19, 2016 12:17 am


She moved around the man inspecting him. His left leg was in a bad shape, deep cut and and if the bone sticking out. Tying a cloth around her mouth, thin leather surgical gloves. Light illuminating the room.
“What happened to him” not a lot of blood but bright red, arterial bleed apply pressure and… a rope tied around his upper leg, a simple tourniquet. She tied her tourniquet on the pressure point. Taking a pulse, weak but steady.
“ He was guiding a plows when it kicked up and hit his leg hard, he was out immediately and lucky were saw him.”
“ This rope? “ the bleeding stopped. Good. Getting her scalpels ready. Bringing his arm straight and locating a vein. Pulse still there.
“ To stop the bleeding ms” it was a little low but good for an amature
“ Lots of blood. Hmm good work boys. Very good work. This may have saved him “ She cut the rope off. Eoghan had the cauterising iron set up setting it up on the table where she pointed.
“Put a bite in his mouth. Boys pass me that leather box and that bottle of liquid second shelf third in “ patience and calm. Bleeding had stopped, priority one. The wound was typical of damage from a battle axe but a plough could do the same given the circumstance.
Rita Hummed.

Slowly, carefully she worked. Injecting painkiller directly into his bloodstream.
“How long ago did you tie the rope.”
“‘Bout fiften minutes miss, we ran as fast as we could, cart was broken.” A slight nod. Cleaning the area around the wound she made a small cut with the scalpel, opening up the skin, finding the artery completely severed. She didn’t have the skills to rejoin it as was but she knew of a trick. The patient was stable for now, she could cauterise and stitch up from here.
“Eoghan can you get me some small tubes form an animal. Pig artery if you can” He looked a little confused but noded and left the room. Arteries were clear and accessible.
“Boys hold him down please this will hurt “ She pointed to his torso and free leg. Humming then singing in Ithecal
“It’s just skin and bones.” Pushing the leg straight, a scream of pain from the old man as she eased it into place. Screaming is good.
“Nothing inside” Steady and calm, set it once set it right and put the patient through as little pain as possible.
“Sleeping alone” There, set in position. Slithering to a shelf for a needle and thread.
“Fingers tie, themselves” Threading the needle with a thick thread and making the knot where she would start stitching the muscle together
“In knots around the heart. It Beats in time”

Eoghan arrived back carrying a small pot, setting it on the table behind her and standing to the side watching her work. She was a little bit rusty with muscles but it soon came back to her, slowly making her way up the leg. Taking her time, artery stemmed. Breaking her song for a moment.
“I should get some clamps. They’ll do to hold an artery in surgery…” A shrug and she starts up the next verse.
“I see the Spine of the world” First part done. Standing up checking her work, satisfied, moving to the pot and sorting through the various animal guts.
“Sparkle and shine, light the inside” Smiling as she found a suitable length of pig vein. Approaching the wound and cutting it to length. Moving to a bench and grabbing raw ingredients.
“I see the spine of the world” Working till the mix was right, then adding the activating part.
“I know it’s mine, twisted and tied” A little quicker now Rita. Let’s get the blood flowing again. Spreading the mixture on both ends of the veins essentially gluing them end to end. Holding it in place.


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[Krome]First day on the job

Postby Rita Fenyo » Tue Jul 19, 2016 12:18 am


“Interesting thing there lassie, may I ask what you’re doing.” A smile
“Something that’s technically bad practice. Procedure is to cauterize the artery if you can’t stop the bleeding, or if a part is missing and the ends won’t join. Something my mother showed me in practice that if given time you can essentially glue a tube in the gap. “ Almost set.
“That a bad thing?”
“Uhhh well we have time. Patient is still alive, not bleeding and given I take the tourniquet off correctly it’ll do. If not it pops, I reapply tourniquet and cauterize “ Carefully she let go of the fragile vein, slowly unwinding and watching the tube, blood started running through at a steady pace. It took a while to remove the whole thing, she had Eoghan keep pressure on as she prepared a healing mix for inside the wound.
“Well I’ve managed to save his leg but he is not to walk until I give him the clear. Otherwise it will rip and internal bleeding is very hard to fix. “ The boys noded, she got to work applying the paste, finished up sealing away the bone and artery. Then stitching up the cut with ease. Something she had practiced over and over again on pig skin then on real flesh and patients. Never yet making a mistake on a patient.

She stood clear of the man, checked his pulse again still weak. The shirt was ruined and her ebony skin contrasted with blood.
“And?” She almost forgot the boys. She considered her words before answering.
“Stopped the bleeding, fixed the bone and saved his leg. He will be under observation for the next day. Once I am satisfied that the pseudo artery is holding I will cast up his leg then move him somewhere probably to your home. Uhhh bones heal fast, muscle not so much. He’s probably down till Rebirth” They noded, quietly. A smile from Rita.
“Go home and tell your mother he’ll be fine. Actually, “ she got a gold nel out her coin purse, “go get something nice for lunch while you’re here.”
“Thank you Ms Rita.” she noded to them as they headed out. Carefully, putting her tools into the boiling pot. Cleaning her skin.
“Very pale” Satisfied she turned back to her friend, removing the cloth from her face. “Anyone looks pale compared to me,” she joked, “Shock and blood loss, when he’s up I’ll give him fluids and something to help speed up recovery. His in safe hands anyway. “ Another knock on the door.

Slithering over with curiosity there was a young woman at the door.
“Can I help you? “ A smile and slight tilt of the head.
“Yes please.” Her voice weak, throat swollen slightly. Standing out the way and beckoning her in.
“Of course mind the mess.” She was a little shy.
“Oh my is he okay” and a little uneasy on her feet. Rita offered a chair, getting her to open her mouth. Tonsils.
“He’s fine now. Get really badly hurt though, took me a while to get him better.” Picking the right medicine and sampling the right amount. Eoghan nowhere to be seen.
“As for you my friend, what you have is what we in the medical profession call tonsillitis” A friendly smile as she made her way back, “I say it’s a fancy name for a very bad throat. Non dangerous infection really. Take a measurement of this in water a day till it’s empty, no skipping please, and you’ll be right as rain, if not come back to me. Also avoid contact with the mouth, especially young children “ Words were delivered with authority but also friendliness.
“So no kissing babies”
“No kissing babies” A bright smile, a knock at the door and the next patient. An old lady with stiff bones. Rock moss and a little bit of leechbane for the old lady. She barely got a chance to sit down with plenty of patiences asking for her help from cuts and bruises, coughs and sneezes, with anything in between really. Checking on her patient monitoring his conditions, more painkillers more patients. A smile and energy in her all the way till early dusk. With no less than fifteen people needing her help.

“I can make it sure but you have to be careful with it. Maiden's kiss is a powerful aphrodisiac. You take a dose about an hour before sex and let your partner get a good smell of the bottle. You are in time so you might get pregnant, no guarantee naturally. These things don’t always work and sometimes take time.”
“What If i’m barren though Ms “ A reassuring smile and a slight yawn.
“You aren’t. If you come in uhh next week I can do the tests and give you another dose. Next cycle I can make sure you have all you need to conceive with high success. If not then it may be something with you husband. Diet is said to be a factor and I have some guides. But still mostly trial with these things.” The patient looked reassured, Rita reminding her one last time to be incredibly careful with the mixture. A long yawn and a rumble from her stomach.
“We’ll someone has been busy” rubbing the sleep out of her eyes.
“And not eaten and dealt with uhh ten people in the last eight hours.” A cunning smile spread across her friends face.
“Well in those eight hours I’ve prepared a feast with enough food to feed a large army. With an Ithecals favorite dish. Selection of fresh game slow cooked and also roasted in spice. With mead pudding for sweat.” She smiled and laughed happily, not knowing what she’d do with her friends to look after her.

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[Krome]First day on the job

Postby Malcolm » Mon Aug 08, 2016 12:55 am

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Knowledge:
Basic
Eoghan: A friend
Specialised
Cooking: Bacon and eggs
Surgery: Cauterising iron
Surgery: Correcting a bone
Medicine: Maiden’s Kiss

Loot: N/A
Injuries: N/A
Fame: +1

Story: 4/5
Collaboration: 0/5
Structure: 4/5

Comment: A quick paced little thread with a lot going on.
Story and structure: There were parts, especially at the beginning where I felt the story jumped ahead too suddenly and you could have set the scene a little better. There was also a hell of a lot of dialog for a work thread, which it says to try and avoid in the guide. Remember to go through the senses, what can your character see, hear, smell. I like the way you use action to show who is speaking. The use of ‘ing’ when it might have been better to use ‘ed’ which I feel is easier to spot if you read the story out loud before posting it.
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