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Postby Bronik » Wed Jul 20, 2016 8:22 am

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It had been a long time since the sails on his boat had been let down and Bronik watched as they unfurled in the light breeze and rose to shake them out, smoothing the wrinkles as flat as he could with open palm. Rynmere was a lot bigger than he had been led to believe and getting free of the dock would prove interesting with all the traffic coming and going. He ran to the back of the boat, having almost forgotten his fishing net, and pulled it in, heaving hard as he leaned backwards, using his body weight to lift the salt stiffened rope from the sea.
Navigating the sandbar proved just as challenging as escaping the docks had been, and soon, Bronik found himself stuck just beyond the breakers, laughed at by a fellow fisherman that gave his vessel a wide berth as he passed by. Bronik marked his mistake down on a piece of paper he had started drawing a rough map of the southern shoreline on and looked over the edge of the boat to see how badly he was stuck. It was a novice mistake to make, and were his sister here, she would never have let him live it down.
The situation called for further investigation and Bronik tired a rope to the mast and threw it overboard before looking out to see if any waves were headed his way that might help get the sloop free. With the coast clear, he dove into the water after peeling off his shirt and trousers, and swum down to the sandy bottom to find that the boat was completely bellied. He came up for a breath and went under again, shovelling sand away from the back of the boat in the hopes that the current direction of the incoming tide would push it back away from the sandbar, and after two or three more trips, it seemed like it just might work.
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Postby Bronik » Wed Jul 20, 2016 9:01 am

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Sailing back into harbour with pride and his ship intact, Bronik quickly pulled in the sail and spun the wheel hard to dock the boat in the small bay that had been allocated to him upon his arrival. He was keen to start exploring the city and surrounding land, but mindful that he didn't have a lot of time after spending most of the morning stuck in the sand, and really wanted to get a head start on building the schooner he had been scribbling down little drawings and plans of throughout his journey to the land of kings. A schooner was only one step up from the longboats he had helped Burjo build all through the rebirth cycle, and he thought with the right materials and the odd expert pair of hired eyes, he would be able to pull it off.
Down below the deck Bronik took up the tools he had stolen from Burjo's workshop the night he had quit and brought them up onto the decking, lining them up in order to make sure everything he needed was accounted for. On the shore he had spent the last two days cutting and processing wood from local trees, just as the master shipwrights and his father had taught him, keeping only the best wood, free of knots and other undesirable imperfections. He had stored the planks in an old abandoned shed and returned now to check on his merchandise.
With everything accounted for, work on the keel, also known as the backbone of the ship, could begin, this piece alone providing enough longitudinal strength to support the weight of the completed ship in or out of water. Being the most important part, Bronik was prepared to spend time on the piece, pay attention to detail, and not be afraid to do it three or four times over until he got it right. He scarfed and bolted the pieces, attaching the stern and sternpost in turn, the first to define the shape of the bow, while the latter would support the rudder. Hammer in hand, he knocked the pieces gently until they lined up well, and turned the bolts to tighten them as best he could before stepping back to look at and appraise his work.
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Postby Bronik » Wed Jul 20, 2016 10:04 am

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Bronik used the clamps he had to make sure the wooden joins were held together securely while he worked on the next part of the design. He couldn't envision himself adding anymore to his starting piece, but instead made time to sketch what some in his business called the 'ribs' though more often than not the next step was more commonly known as putting together the frame, something that could be difficult to achieve without the right tools. Cutting planks wasn't too difficult but shaping the ribs of a boat from the logs he had felled would take an expert and that meant parting with coin he couldn't afford to spend, unless he could offer something else in exchange.
After a brief discussion with one of the local shipwrights, an old retired man by the name of Gavin Wells, Bronik was able to negotiate an agreement that would be beneficial to them both. For a thirty percent share in all of the fish Bronik caught for the rest of the season, and a pile of firewood, Gavin would get in contact with the man who used to help him cut all the frames for his boats, and agreed to have the work done in the next few days, seen as acquiring wood wouldn't be a problem. It meant Bronik wouldn't be able to spend as much time building, instead focusing on increasing his catch, or risk cutting his losses, he would have to fish from dawn till dusk.
With the futtocks, or floor pieces organised, the man would be able to shift his attention to getting his hands on a means of steaming the planks for the shell of the boat, as softening them enough to get the right kind of bend might be difficult otherwise. He would also have to build a keelson, which was erected over the top of the original keel and ribs to strengthen and finish the skeleton of the ship. A trip to the local library would not go amiss either, as Bronik had some research to do about caulking, a means of sealing the seams of the ship, and would need to inquire about where he could get his hands on a caulking iron, mallet, and enough tar to make sure the boat was watertight and fit for sailing, not only around the coast, but across the sea.
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Postby Faith » Mon Aug 08, 2016 11:29 am

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Bronik

Points!:
Story: 5/5
Collaboration: 0/ 5 (solo thread)
Structure: 5/ 5

Knowledge:
Basic
Fishing: how to maximise the catch
Location: Rynmere docks
Location: Andaris Library
Seafaring: techniques for furling and unfurling sails
Seafaring: docking safely
Ship Building: the theory of steaming wood
Ship Building: planning helps maximise every piece of wood
Swimming: Breath control whilst diving

Specialised
Navigation: avoiding getting stuck on the sandbar
Seafaring: effects of saltwater on rope
Ship Building: avoiding imperfections in wood
Ship Building: strengthening the keel and ribs
Swimming: Increasing lung capacity with practice

Loot:
Loss: 30% of your fish for this season & firewood
Gains: shaped ribs for your schooner

Fame:
-1 for scuppering the ship and being laughed at. (general bad deed - with "bad" being 'steering your ship badly', rather than evil)

Overview:

General comments. I really enjoyed reading this thread - you packed a lot of information in there! I learnt about shipbuilding, too - so thank you! I was most impressed with how you manage to portray Bronik - his personality is clear and I feel like I knew how the interaction with the NPC Gavin went, even though you used no dialogue. The thread really evoked imagery for me, I could picture the scowl on his face as the ships went around his and his look of determined pride as he came back into dock. You packed a lot into three posts, I look forward to reading more of Bronik's adventures!

Story - Really interesting story - I particularly enjoyed seeing Bronik's problem solving abilities coming to the fore in this thread. You kept the pace of the story going throughout whilst keeping the plot coherant and fluid.

Structure I love your writing style - it's easy to read and well paced. The only issue I had was having to highlight your text in order to read it, as it was a bit hard to read.

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